omg! that was funny what inuyasha did! so funny. love it

well you couldnt stop so now im having dreams that arent pretty unless your kagome and im not so p;ease hurry and finish the story cuz its killing whats left of my sanity and if you dont ill end up like Chris Crocker

dude do you know what you did to my imagination omg man i burst out laughing feeling sorry bad and jealous towards kagome man my dreams are gonna be award

Ch1. I like it so far but it could have smoother transitions between thoughts and the actions of characters. It's very plausible that inu wouldn't have done his hw, that kag would be mad, and that she would help him but it just seemed all too smooshed together and too fast.
The flow of the story is broke up in some cases by repetition (double use of the word head in the beginning), from spelling errors (story instead of store), and small grammar errors here and there. Also, who leaves food in the micro wave. That's not very food safe. My only other thought is to the note left for kag. It would be much more appealing to have the note written out in true note form, seperated from the text. It is confusing otherwise. Thank you. I'll keep reading.