You have a good story going i hope you do write more becuse you can't leave you styory like that you just ahve to go on.

this is so so good! do more soon!

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

this was great can't wait for the other chapters .

Even a beta would be hard pressed to correct this fic. Perhaps you should learn something about grammar and sentence structure before posting, or better yet, learn how to paragraph. For a lemon, it is more than obvious that you are far to young to be writing such things.

I really like this story alot. Can you please write some more chapters?

chap three is pathetic very much so
the story was good