Reviews for Collide by BelovedStranger

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LoveAndFaith (Chapter 2) - Sat 16 May 2015

Great story, keep it coming.

How God Created Mother

 God took the fragrance of a flower,
 The majesty of a tree,
 The gentleness of a morning a dew
 The calm of a quiet sea,
 The beauty of a twilight hour
 The soul of a starry night
 The laughter of the rippling brook,
 The grace of a bird in flight,
 Then God fashioned from these things
 A creation like no other,
 And when His masterpiece was through,
 He called it simply...MOTHER.

 Happy Mother's Day!

 M- is the million things she gave me.
 O- means only that she's growing old.
 T- is for the tears shed to save me.
 H- is for her heart of purest gold.
 E- is for her eyes, with love & light shining.
 R- means right, and right she'll always be.

 Happy Mother's Day!


Stella Mira (Chapter 2) - Sat 16 May 2015

First of all... *rolls on the floor cackling*

Oh, Sessh?maru. You dunno even the half of it. That cute little thing is playing you around her little finger and you obviously choose to ignore this. As if someone can be so oblivious, especially a smart girl like our Kaggie. Pfft. Excuse me while I laugh some more over here.

Now, on to the real review! I LOVED THIS CHAPTER! We see Sessh?maru's POV, which is an eye opener. I have to applaud you for describing his character so perfectly in just one chapter. Woah. Kudos, girl! You've got some mad writing skills there. *bows* And I love him. He’s arrogant but he’s got what it takes to be arrogant. He’s not some snobby little kid who dunno what the fuck he’s talking about. And I love his profession, no lie. The fact that he’s successful in such an antagonizing work…that says it all.

Agh on the illiterate, sex-starved morons stalking the internet for…what? I mean, go watch some porn, morons. It doesn’t require you to type – since you obviously can’t – and it doesn’t bother anyone who dun wanna be bothered. >.>

And now to our delightful Kaggie. I’ve said it before and I’ll say it again. She’s a spitfire, that girl! WOO! Burning hot and hotter. I love the way she handles him, ‘cause let’s face it, oh yeah, she does. Bwahaha. But the thing is…she cares. She cares for a total stranger who’s an arrogant ass so far…basically. His only saving grace is that he’s an intelligent, witty, cultured arrogant ass. But she cares.

“Because I know you exist.” That is one powerful sentence. Seriously cutting to the bone. Man, he’s so damn lucky, he doesn’t even know how much. Lol

Thank you for such a quick update! I really appreciate your efforts! I’m eagerly waiting for the next chapter!


Blommie8 (Chapter 2) - Fri 15 May 2015
Nice conversation. I like the chemistry they shared. Kee writing. Till next

KEdakumi (Chapter 2) - Fri 15 May 2015

Loving the little details.

Can't wait for more.


No Uta (Chapter 1) - Tue 12 May 2015

This is bloody brilliant. I have been reading your work for quite sometime. I must say I found myself grinning from ear to ear at Kagome's and Sesshomaru's online interaction. Looks like I'll be hanging on your every word yet again. Fantastic first chapter! 


Susy V (Chapter 1) - Mon 11 May 2015

Hook, line and sinker! Finally, I get something I can relate to! The whole text lingo is so aggravating. Why won't people type correctly!? Although I do it sometimes, I have a deep irritation for people who do it ALL THE TIME. My friends, especially. 

 

A YWAYS! I so love where this story is heading! So added this to my liked stories. Until next time!


Misaki (Chapter 1) - Mon 11 May 2015

OOOOOHHHHHH!!!!! I already love this fanfiction!!! Your stories are all so amazing and this one sounds like its going to be really good. Keep up the amazing work!!


Stella Mira (Chapter 1) - Mon 11 May 2015

A new story from you! WOO! *is super excited*

I love this funky Kagome! She’s giving off the impression that she’s some meek, boring bookworm (to avoid all the idiots who aren’t worth her time, I imagine) when she’s a spitfire and a real hoot to hang out with. Not that bookworms are boring. Intellectual people are the real challenge. *nods* Her inner monologues amuse me greatly, especially her driving fits. I gotta agree with her, though. Some people should really stay off the streets. Dun even lemme get started on drunk drivers… And I love how she doesn’t have a filter in her thoughts or language. It’s very refreshing!

Bwaha. Sango is giving in to Miroku’s lecherous ways and having the time of her life. I have to admit that I always thought she’d be worse than him if he ever infected her with the kinky bug. Plus, I would too, in her place. XD

I’ve never tried online chatting, except Dokuga chat, so I never knew it was this widespread. I’m not that surprised it has degenerated into sex chatting, though. Social media always take a turn for the worse, no matter how fun they begin out to be. It’s real hard finding someone who just wants to talk through a random list of strangers. I admit though that I’ve met people on Dokuga that are now practically family to me, so sometimes, you get lucky. Distance is irrelevant. People you see every day can care a whole of a lot less than people you’ll probably only meet once or twice but talk to daily. I love how you highlighted this because it’s so profoundly true.

I very much like the language, like always. It’s crisp and to the point, with the right amount of detail, grammatically perfect. The words just breeze by, and before I know it, I’m at the last sentence and craving more. It’s not easy to make someone so immersed in the story that they forget what page they’re on until they realize there’s no more. Kudos to you! It reminds me of one of my favorite quotes by Nathaniel Hawthorne: “Easy reading is damn hard writing.” So thank you for your efforts. I really do appreciate all the attention and hard work you put in your writing, so we can read such wonderful words and stories!

And what do you know? Someone interesting, albeit quite arrogant, aloof, and tight-lipped…appears! It sounds like this is gonna be so much fun! When I think of all the complications though…’cause it’s an internet relationship, I expect lots of drama. And you write drama so damn well that I really can’t wait for the plot to unfold!

Looking forward to the next chapter! *is waiting anxiously*


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