I did like the fic. The only problem I had was that the ending seemed rushed to me. You went into such detail during most of the fic. that I found the last chapter wanting. I would have liked a bit on what happened to Sango and Inubaka. Who was the father? Did they all say together? You know that kind of thing to give a reference since you did a significant jump on how time had passed and Sessy/Kags having a daughter. I just think it would have been a critical piece of reference. Not a flame, just my personal perspective. Personally, I believe you are an excellent writer with a great imagination (ex. All "ningen" wishes would be selfish therefore leaving it up to the Kami's to make the decision). Plus, whenever I do critique a fic. I make sure to make it constructive. One learns nothing, nor do you teach anything by just saying "I don't like it," I am also a published author and a Professor, so I find that an important thing to do when reviewing anything. Please keep up the great work, and I look forward to reading more of your publications.
I wanted to say that so far I am really enjoying this story. It is a very unlike fanfic for Sess/Kag story. The main thing I wanted to say about Chapter 3 is how you addressed discipline in the upbringing of a child. A lot of generation X seem to very lenient when it comes to discipline. I was brought up to be respectful to anyone and everyone. Life is a precious gift, and if you are rude or nasty to people you will lose out on the gift of having "true friends" in your life. Personally, I think this chapter did an excellent job of demonstrating what happens to a child when they are not raised to respect, not only their own life but the life of others. People would be very surprised how a simple thank you or smile will brighten a person's day. So, I must say you are definitely someone of character to write the way you do and have a very imaginative writing talent. It will be a geat pleasure to continue to read this fanfiction to the end. I hardly every review just a chapter, but chapter 3 really made a statement that I thought needed to be applauded.
This was quite an enjoyable story to read. I always enjoy a good "Kagome gets to train to her full strength and takes contol" fic. Thank you for sharing this story with us here on Dokuga. I look forward to perusing your other works.
Yea, thats was so weird to maje Kouga so determine and kill him, interesting
The story seems more informative than anything. While it is a great tale you are spinning it seems monotonous I can't feel the characters emotions. I do not get the butterflies in my tummy even in the next chapter where sessh blood heated up, I usually squeal like a highschooler at that point but this time around I do not feel the romance, the mood. You should read Inescapable by Beloved stranger the feelings and emotions are so raw and exhilarating! Despite all this the story is still a great read, I find myself wanting to know how it ends especially since u said Kags life span would not merge, very intriguing. Not many writers would be so bold to scare us that way. Plus if I didn't like it I wouldn't even bother to review because im to blunt.but this, this is good, great writing, grammar etc just needs emotion.
Yay! Happy endings all around (:
(Chapter 6) - Thu 23 Jun 2016
Well you tied it all up very nicely! Thank you for a very entertaining story. I'm guessing that this is the last chapter. Hope to see another story soon.
Omg awesome now i want to know who the daddy is lol can we get one more chappie?
This story was very good enjoyed it thank you.
Great story! I've been waiting for the next chapter to come out, to see how Sesshomaru and Kagome continue in their relationship. I thought there'd be two additional chapters (6 and 7) instead of just one chapter to finish, but I'm very pleased with how the story ended. Thank you for updating it! :)
(Chapter 6) - Wed 22 Jun 2016
what an epic conclusion!
(Chapter 5) - Thu 12 May 2016
Well 2 bite the dust at the hands of our lovely couple
So good, keep it coming.
How God Created Mother
Good took the fragrance of a flower,
The majesty of a tree,
The gentleness of a morning a dew
The calm of a quiet sea,
The beauty of a twilight hour
The soul of a starry night
The laughter of the rippling brook,
The grace of a bird in flight,
Then God fashioned from these things
A creation like no other,
And when His masterpiece was through,
He called it simply...MOTHER.
Happy Mother's Day!
There are Angels
God put on this Earth
Who care for us and guide us.
You can feel their love and gentleness as they walk through life beside us.
They do great things for us every day they whisper in our ears, they even hold us in their hearts when we are filled with all our fears.
They are always there to give us a hug and try to make us smile.
They treat us with the respect and love, they treat us like their own child.
God blessed me with an Angel, I’m proud to call my own.
She’s been with me throughout my life, been with me as I’ve grown.
She’s guided me the best she can, she’s taught me like no other, and I’m thankful I’m the lucky one who get’s to call her
WOW WOW WOW!!!Kikyo and Kouga offed in the same chapter!! Did not expect that. I'm glad Krista left Sango to be with Kagome. Sad but very understandable. I hope Sango and Miroku come to their senses soon. Great chapter! Thanks so much!
OMG PLEASE PUT UP A NEW CHAPTER SOON I LOVE THIS STORY I HAVE BEEN WAITING SO LONG!!!
(Chapter 5) - Sun 08 May 2016
Great update had to reread the whole story to remember it's been so long .hoping to re more soon rather than later.
Just found this story and I love it. Each chapter is very long, but it's so well written that I couldn't stop reading the five posted so far. I hope that more chapters will be posted soon, so I can read how things end up between Kag/Sess, as well as what happens with the Inu pack and Naraku. Keep up the excellent work!
(Chapter 4) - Tue 26 Jan 2016
Great story :)
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