I somewhat like your story, the only thing/things that really bothers me is that you made her into a vampire and you're trying make vampires seem as though they're a type of demon. Also can you please find a beta or someone to edit your chapters before you post them. I'm not trying to be mean or anything just provide honest criticism that May or may not help you, if you decide to take my suggestions and/or critiques the right way. You have a few writing or typing errors per chapter that I think you should go back and change. Other than that and the vampire thing, it's a really good story, you capture the characters' personality yet make them uniquely yours, and that's something that rarely happens with this pairing from what I've read so far.
keep up the work. Hope you update soon.
Keep it coming.
Rachael (Chapter 12) - Thu 10 Jul 2014
best story ever please continue this it was amazing
That was such a great ending to the chapter. Sango fainting was amusing yet... I don't know... it's uncharateristic of her to faint at the site of gore, however it fit the moment perfectly!
Usually when a character faints it sends a signal similar to angst to the audience. However, her fainting was almost relaxing to read. I guess after such a stressful and eventful day, someone aka. Sango, just needed a break from reality. haha. I can almost envision Kagome's shocked face turn into a pleasant smile as she looks at Sango and shakes her head (you didn't have to faint you silly girl). This ending seems to be the calm before the storm. . . Baaah!I don't know. Sometimes I read too much into these things.
Anyway. It makes sense for kagome's friends to be weary of her. I'm glad that you didn't have them fully accept her. They have to get used to this new kagome. It's more realistic.
I wonder what the future holds for our Kagome?
Fantastic job as always.
Can't wait for the next update!
jesica (Chapter 1) - Thu 10 Jul 2014
im loving this story. im ready for more chapters
mari (Chapter 12) - Wed 09 Jul 2014
good luck in you're job great updates thank you.
Ha! That was just too funny when sango socked kikyo! I can't wait to see what you have in store for us next
gomemaru (Chapter 12) - Wed 09 Jul 2014
thanks for clearing up the shippo thing for us. kikyo got exactly what she deserves, i still thinks she needs another beat down!!
gomemaru (Chapter 11) - Wed 09 Jul 2014
yeah take that kikyo your no where near gomes level
rose (Chapter 12) - Wed 09 Jul 2014
next chapter please
rose (Chapter 10) - Wed 09 Jul 2014
next chapter please
jesica (Chapter 1) - Wed 09 Jul 2014
i am loving this story cant wait till more chapters are posted
Sailor Moon new anime has already premiered on tv, If you missed it you can watch it on youtube. Nice chapter, keep it coming.
rose (Chapter 11) - Wed 09 Jul 2014
next chapter please
This story is turning out beautifully. Can't wait for the rest. I'm wondering what is going to happen.
great story i wonder how bad and stupid inuyasha will act this time? i do have question thou when did shippo see kagome jump down the well? , he acted really calm
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