LoveAndFaith (Chapter 8) - Thu 13 Mar 2014

Great story, keep it coming. Happy Belated Valentine's Day!


Diane (Chapter 5) - Wed 12 Mar 2014

Not bad, have more errors than the previous chapters. Slight correction here “When I was a teenager I went into the past to the futile era. It's feudal not futile.


Diane Peter (Chapter 4) - Wed 12 Mar 2014

Just discovered this tonight. Am enjoying it. Slight correction, a mussel is a type of clam, you wanted muscle or muscles.


KEdakumi (Chapter 7) - Fri 27 Dec 2013

No matter how fancy you decorate it... A cage is still a cage. Is she going to confuse Stockholm Syndrome with love? Hmm... Can't wait for more.


CaithSidhe (Chapter 7) - Thu 26 Dec 2013

I really like your story. It is like a  tragicomedy. But I'm confused about you calling a kimono belt a 'geisha'. As far as I know, there is not just one kimono belt, you need at least six and theyare called Datejime, Koshihimo,Korin, 2nd. Datejime,Obi and Obijime as far as I know. Isn't geisha a female entertainer? Is your autocorrect wreacking havoc ? This comment is not meant as a flame, I'm just a bit in costumeing and tend to be a stickler for detail (;-)) Blame it on me. Though I thoroughly enjoy a well researched story background and ambience.  You've got talent, keep on the good work - I'm looking forward to your next chapter!


Sakura23 (Chapter 6) - Wed 25 Dec 2013

This is looking really good so far. /i cant wait to see what is yet to come 


Zeelian (Chapter 5) - Tue 10 Dec 2013

Looking good, but still needs more beta/proof-reading

Another few small word misses

"Futile era" instead of "feudal era" (futile means useless/in vain "their efforts to put out the fire were futile, the house burned to the ground").

"Dare his child" about Miroku should be "bare his child"


Also you need to have a look at your use of "your" (this goes for all chapters) many of the places where you wrote "your" it's supposed to be "you're". "Your" shows ownership, "your father" "your experiance" and so on, "You're" is an contraction of "you are".

An easy way to tell wich one is correct is to test using "my" and "you are". (shamelessly copied examples):

You’re:

 1. “You’re my best friend.”

Test: “You are my best friend.”

(Correct!)

 

2. “I like you’re backpack.”

Test: “I like you are backpack.”

(Incorrect.)

 

Your:

 1. “Your hair is so cool.”

Test: “My hair is so cool.”

(Correct!)

 

2. “Your going to meet me at 6 p.m.”

Test: “My going to meet me at 6 p.m.”

(Incorrect.)


 


elizabeth (Chapter 5) - Mon 09 Dec 2013

i really liked this chapter ,SESSHOMARU AND KAGOMEE por not be happy,l hope with never find eternal peace to his soul la yukai witch


Zeelian (Chapter 4) - Sat 07 Dec 2013

At the passage about the reincarnated Sangos husband you refer to him as a "fowl man" i am guessing you mean "foul" as in repulsive, mean or just overal bad person?

Fowl is the word used when refering to various species of birds, like "waterfowl" "domestic fowl" or when refering to the meat from birds ("fowl"= meat from birds, "pork"= meat from pigs/swine & "beef"= meat from "bowines" aka cows)


elizabeth (Chapter 1) - Wed 27 Nov 2013

sorry  my english  is bad  one  can  understand my comment . sesshomaru  must regain  his  true  body 


elizabeth (Chapter 2) - Wed 27 Nov 2013

lhope  sesshomaru gets his real boby. wicked wich  must  have  hidden  the body sesshomaru


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 2) - Wed 27 Nov 2013

I like this story so far. I find it somewhat fascinating and a slight of fantasy. Maybe they might find a way to communicate with each other mentally; just a thought. Keep up the nice writing. Great job!


KEdakumi (Chapter 2) - Wed 27 Nov 2013

Ooops... almost dropped him.  So the mirror reflects his true self.  Can't wait for more!


KEdakumi (Chapter 1) - Tue 26 Nov 2013

It's a good start. Sesshoumaru seems a bit OOC... but it's not bad.  I like him with a bit more feeling.  Should be interesting to find out why they had to marry in secret. Can't wait to see if he finds a way to break this curse.


jk (Chapter 1) - Tue 26 Nov 2013

It's nice n there can be a loop hole in the curse when she said kagome will nvr birth his children which she already has but if u r nt givin a happy ending then he is cursed to be a dog for all eternity but no one said after dying kagome can't choose to be born as a dog for all eternity ????


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