Looking good, but still needs more beta/proof-reading
Another few small word misses
"Futile era" instead of "feudal era" (futile means useless/in vain "their efforts to put out the fire were futile, the house burned to the ground").
"Dare his child" about Miroku should be "bare his child"
Also you need to have a look at your use of "your" (this goes for all chapters) many of the places where you wrote "your" it's supposed to be "you're". "Your" shows ownership, "your father" "your experiance" and so on, "You're" is an contraction of "you are".
An easy way to tell wich one is correct is to test using "my" and "you are". (shamelessly copied examples):
1. “You’re my best friend.”
Test: “You are my best friend.”
2. “I like you’re backpack.”
Test: “I like you are backpack.”
1. “Your hair is so cool.”
Test: “My hair is so cool.”
2. “Your going to meet me at 6 p.m.”
Test: “My going to meet me at 6 p.m.”
i really liked this chapter ,SESSHOMARU AND KAGOMEE por not be happy,l hope with never find eternal peace to his soul la yukai witch
(Chapter 4) - Sat 07 Dec 2013
At the passage about the reincarnated Sangos husband you refer to him as a "fowl man" i am guessing you mean "foul" as in repulsive, mean or just overal bad person?
Fowl is the word used when refering to various species of birds, like "waterfowl" "domestic fowl" or when refering to the meat from birds ("fowl"= meat from birds, "pork"= meat from pigs/swine & "beef"= meat from "bowines" aka cows)
sorry my english is bad one can understand my comment . sesshomaru must regain his true body
lhope sesshomaru gets his real boby. wicked wich must have hidden the body sesshomaru
I like this story so far. I find it somewhat fascinating and a slight of fantasy. Maybe they might find a way to communicate with each other mentally; just a thought. Keep up the nice writing. Great job!
Ooops... almost dropped him. So the mirror reflects his true self. Can't wait for more!
It's a good start. Sesshoumaru seems a bit OOC... but it's not bad. I like him with a bit more feeling. Should be interesting to find out why they had to marry in secret. Can't wait to see if he finds a way to break this curse.
(Chapter 1) - Tue 26 Nov 2013
It's nice n there can be a loop hole in the curse when she said kagome will nvr birth his children which she already has but if u r nt givin a happy ending then he is cursed to be a dog for all eternity but no one said after dying kagome can't choose to be born as a dog for all eternity ????