More, keep it coming.
It's caught my interest. I have but only one tip. Don't let him get overly kind and pleasant too quickly.
Kagome has informed him on how he acted and his attitude. If he reacts too kind or talkative, it can go badly for him. He needs to keep some semblence of his former cold and indifferent self as he gets his bearings here. Even his servants can take his attitude and use it against him if any one of them isn't happy with working for him. He needs to go to his study and read alittle before taking off to travel. I know he wants to find Kagome, but he doesn't even know at what point in time he has landed in the Feudal Era. With Kagome, she always stayed at 500 yrs past and then her future but if Sesshoumaru has gone back further than the future when he and Kagome met where she knows about the spell, gave her half his money, then Rin would be grown by then. You didn't say how long ago the well had sealed and you did say that Kagome finished school but didn't go to college. Kagome was still in high school or going into high school before they defeated Naraku.
I just don't want you to trip over anything since you are having him going off to find Kagome and see if she knows him from the future. I do like this though and I'll be looking for updates.
I like leaving my thoughts and don't approve of the one liners like, "great job. Update.", or " love it, more updates", etc. I enjoy sharing my thoughts and what I like or don't like. It lets you know if you're really doing a good job or not. Oh, and I did notice a few typos like, "your/ you're or you are". Sesshoumaru is formal and doesn't use contractions though the InuTachi would at times from being around Kagome so much. This is really not a BIG deal, but well.... JEN
Great chapter, keep it coming.
Keep it coming.
i like where this is going!
i like where this is going!
Love the story, keep it coming.
Midian (Chapter 1) - Mon 08 Jul 2013
Good start keep up the good work
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