I'm actually a beta for a few authors on FF, as well as a writer myself & let me just say this, I'm truly impressed. The writing flowed very well & there was just enough scene & character development for a well rounded one shot. While it could be expanded, it works well as it is & that is a fine line to walk, so bravo! The portrayal of Kagome & Sesshoumaru are just as I like them & you can tell that Kags has finally grown up from her teenage years (thank god!). It's a personal pet peeve of mine to have her be the constant weak whimpering damsel in distress. A backbone is a damn good thing when mating that tall hunk of scrumptious. Again, wonderfully done! A definite fav!
The boy always did creep me out. Such a torturously good one-shot.
tonya (Chapter 1) - Fri 19 Apr 2013
this is a great story! loved it!
Ennui (Chapter 1) - Fri 19 Apr 2013
Vindictive or not, I really enjoyed this. I get those moods to 'hurt' someone in my writing as well and Hojo and sometimes InuYasha feel my wrath.
Good first attempt!
Lol that was very interesting! Good job keep up the good work! :-)
So, so cool! :)
i need you to write more for this, possibly, mommaH being Kikyo reborn or something
This was great.
You are so wonderfully evil
Ha, you will quickly learn I am the type of reviewer who tends to give negative reviews wheneverI read something i do not like. I never hold my words back and I am sure the writers hate my truth. But no worries you did A great job on this. I mean wow this version of Kagome is outstanding, by far one of the best. You ate offocailly going to be one of my favs and that doesn't happen to often. Are you sure this its your first? I necer really ask but could you write more? I will be keeping an eye out for U ;) Absolutely wonderful
really good!, good job!! =]
I really liked this! It is something I haven't read before and was very interesting. I wonder will you be doing a sequel to it? :)
Very nice, vindictive or BAMF Kagome is just amazing.
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