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Leahchan13 (Chapter 22) - Thu 07 Mar 2013

OH MY!!! Everything is about to get crazy!...cool lol! Thanks for the update and please update as soon as you can!


Voracious (Chapter 19) - Thu 07 Mar 2013

 Oh and one more thing, I did notice a few errors in this chapter like :

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It was just passed midnight in the >> It was just past midnight...

He was sitting in his officiate rooms >> He was sitting in his official rooms ... or any other word... Officiate is a verb and so should not be there

Spells and wards prevented those walls from being effected >> Should be affected as affect is a verb and effect is a noun. So no such thing as effected.

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Not trying to be a grammar queen here but these are the ones that I recalled. Considering that you create and post those brilliant chapters without any beta, yo definitely are doing a great job by yourself. If need be, I would love to beta for you. :D (*wrings her hands and cackles evilly* I'm trying to advertise myself here :P)

 

 

 ~Voracious


Voracious (Chapter 19) - Thu 07 Mar 2013

 I've a feeling and quite a good one at that, that our dearest Sesshou is the main culprit/ villain here and the mer-prince, the misunderstood hero. What do you say, am I correct ? :) 

Loved the chapters and a big hug for belting them out regularly even when you're busy. I must admit I'd a very vague and misunderstood concept of the display the mer prince presented kagome with, a few chapters back. I was like, whats a hole? O_o and why is it there ? I know, I know sounds totally clueless of me, but in my defense I was picturing the display in reverse position that is the position someone is in when they're semi-reclining sort of and leaning on their elbows backwards. So yeah, the next chappie cleared all my doubts and the visual in ma head was clear ~blushes~ Poor kagome getting stuck in those situations! :D

Please keep them coming!

~Voracious

 

 

 

 

 

 


Leahchan13 (Chapter 21) - Wed 06 Mar 2013

It's going great so far good job! I also think that the Merking could possibly be Sesshomaru?Hmm...I have noticed how you do not use names for them both! Ihope he is Merking...he seems so much better~! Lol loving this story keep up the good work and please update soon~!!


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 21) - Wed 06 Mar 2013

Keep it coming.


taixi (Chapter 21) - Wed 06 Mar 2013

Hi there, loving this story so far.  But are you aware you have disallowed anonymous reviews? I have been wanting to leave a review for a while but forgot my password and I finally motivated my lazy butt to create a new one.

Anyhow, you're doing a great job, not least of which is evidenced by the fact that I'm loving your Merfolk.  I usually shy away from stories with lots of OCs but I'm loving all your OCs here! 

Even before the scene where the Western Lord was shown being so heartless to his mother, I found myself rooting for the Mer-King -- love his reaction to watching Kagome after he made his display in the sand! So proud but heartfelt at the same time.  At first I thought, "I shouldn't get my hopes up here, there is no hope for the Mer-King since after all this is posted on Dokuga and Sesshoumaru will get the girl" ... but then I realized that you seem purposefully to have avoided using the actual name for either the Mer-King or the Western Lord.  (Unless I'm wrong, I don't think you have used the name for the Western Lord once yet).  After the scene with the mother in the dungeon (or captivity cave) as well as all the "blood in the water" allusions, I'm thinking there is still a chance for our Mer-King to emerge victorious, and indeed perhaps the Mer-King, not the current Western Lord, could be Sesshoumaru himself.  (Either way, I love your Mer-King!) 

Great job creating the folklore and I think the fact that Sango was saved by the Merfolk as a child is a wonderful touch.  Very intriguing as to what is this mysterious memory that Kagome can't quite recall.

As for the fact that you don't have a Beta - are you looking for one?  I only note this because you asked but for example here is one correction from Ch 21 - "She forced her way passed villagers" - should be "past" instead. 


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 20) - Tue 05 Mar 2013

Keep it coming.


Winters_Snow (Chapter 19) - Tue 05 Mar 2013

Great twist!  Did not see that coming! Love how it keeps getting better and I cannot wait to see what happens next!


Eliona (Chapter 19) - Tue 05 Mar 2013

Totally not liking Sesshomafu right now! His poor mother :( but now im ever so curious how this is all going to tie up! :D keep up the good work.


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 19) - Mon 04 Mar 2013

From just read this chapter I definitely know that  DaiYoukai monster is not Sesshomaru, Kagome would not want to be with that evil monster! Keep it coming.


Mrs_Sesshomaru (Chapter 19) - Mon 04 Mar 2013

*jaw hanging open - AGAIN!* What the...? *cough* Wha...? *sputter* Umm... 0_o Hmmm... Well now... Hmm... *thinks for a sec* Ummm... one question: Why is Sesshomaru being such a douchebag?!  *LOL* Okay, okay... I'm totally intrigued now.  Are you sure this is a Sess/Kag story?  'Cause there's no way Kags will fall for the sort of male who treats his own mother so poorly!  I'm like... speechless!  And I thought I made him out to be an asshole in my fic... holy crap you got me beat - awesome freaking job cuz I am, again, floored!  Holy freakin' crap. SMDH And I still don't trust Jaken... they will have to actually catch somebody else in the act of treachery.  Maybe he's setting this poor Hito fella up to take the focus off himself!  Ha! Totally possible... Dude I am so done trying to guess what happens next *LOL* I've been blindsided the last 2 chaps.


Jemillia Grant (Chapter 18) - Mon 04 Mar 2013

Keep it coming! I am at the edge of my seat! I can't wait to see if Kagome will go with the Merprince. I hope that she loves him as much as he does her. I'll be waiting!


Eliona (Chapter 18) - Mon 04 Mar 2013

this story is absolutely fascinating! please please PLEASE updatesoon! :D


Loveyaa (Chapter 18) - Sun 03 Mar 2013

Hmm...interesting. I can't wait to see what happens next :)


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 18) - Sun 03 Mar 2013

Keep it coming.


Mrs_Sesshomaru (Chapter 18) - Sun 03 Mar 2013

Okay so freeze - Jaken is a traitor?!  *jaw drops* The horror!  What the...?!  Yes, I'm very aware you didn't say a name *LOL* but who else could it be?  He's the only one close to Sess... AND he's a kappa - water youkai.  Wooow... my mind is totally blown right now!!  How dare that little SOB (or anybody for that matter) betray Sesshomaru?  And how come he cannot detect the deceit?  I am shocked & appalled *LOL* not to mention totally floored by this twist - GREAT JOB!!! Awaiting the next update on the edge of my seat!


Leahchan13 (Chapter 18) - Sun 03 Mar 2013

Hmm...how very interesting! I can't wait to see what is going to happen! Please update soon please!!!


KouseiJL (Chapter 18) - Sun 03 Mar 2013

And the intrigue begins!! I'm really enjoying the history and depth you're putting into your story! I'm anticipating the next chapter and hoping to learn more of the backstory! Thank you for sharing your talent!

Kousei


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 17) - Sat 02 Mar 2013

Keep it coming.


Mrs_Sesshomaru (Chapter 16) - Sat 02 Mar 2013

Great chaps.  Where is Sess though?  Sounds like the merprince is gonna put the moves on Kags real soon so he better hurry his arrogant but up! *LOL* Looking forward to the next update & I totally understand about muses - fickle little jerks.

 


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