Quite an interesting story you have here. I keep wondering how she will bump into Sesshoumaru and have the cat out of the bag. I can't really see him going to the shikon just willy nilly. I almost hope that Kagome doesn't get the hang of it. I can't wait to see what happens next :)
I don't frequent strip clubs but I can see someone trying to settle crippling debts in this way and smiling on the outside while trying to tamp down their innner turmoil. So plotline is believable.
Spelling and grammar are good. I occasionally saw an error but nothing to severe.
I like the use of the term youkai instead of demon. Also, I like the inclusion of the politics of a strip club. I am given to understand they are quite tense behind the stage and fight often.
I am not sure about Kikyou's depiction, it seems a little heavy handed to serve as contrast for Kagome.
Anyway, those are my thoughts.
so when I started to read this fic I already knew that pole dancing took a lot of strength, flexibility, and control.... but i didn't really know how it all worked, so I went hunting down videos from the copetitions and stuff and I have to say that it is crazy awesome to watch! anyways, I'm glad she has people helping her!
Keep it coming, Happy Belated Mother's Day!
This is so cute and Kagome sounds so nervous about all of it. Haha please I hope you update soon.
poor girl.... I hope she gets more confidence from the expeariences she is going to have. hopefully one of the other girls will be nice and help her out.
Jelly (Chapter 5) - Mon 22 Apr 2013
I love the story I think its progressing very well. And Miroku is the DJ! XD Perfect match. But I figured I should let you know that in the most recent chapter at the very end, the man's name's is Hojo. Is it a different Hojo than the one Kagome broke up with in chapter four
here --> "Kagome shifted uncomfortably as Kikyou began to remove her clothes without a second thought. She followed suit though, and removed her clothes as well. She didn’t have anything sexy per say, she had thrown all her lingerie out when her and Hojo had broken up, so she just decided on black booty shorts with a matching black bra. That wasn’t too bad, was it?"
I got a little confused when I read it so I figured I would ask.
Keep it coming.
rose (Chapter 5) - Mon 22 Apr 2013
next chapter please
Nelly (Chapter 5) - Mon 22 Apr 2013
Its really a great story! I love it when you update!
megan (Chapter 5) - Mon 22 Apr 2013
I honestly didnt think I was going to like this story.....but Im loving it,lol!!! I just wish there were more frequent updates. Cant wait to see what happens!
I'm so happy you updated. Now I wonder when Sesshomaru is going to show his face at Shikon..hmmmm. Lol please update soon.
Hmmm I had a feeling Kikyou would be a natural at this. Maybe...just maybe she has some well kept hidden secrets from Kaggie? Well done, Kags! Show them what you're made of and don't let those dancing girls and lewd men get the hand on you! I is a big fan of Jakotsu, so I am extremely happy that you included him! And YAY for attracting dragons! They always are smexy beasts!
I am really intrigued now! Looking forward to more!
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