Keep it coming.
Sorry just a random question: Didn't Sesshomaru chain Kagome to their bed? how did she get out in order to play in the storm??
I love this story and I am very happy you have updated it. I cannot wait to see what happens next be it with Mai or InuYasha with Kikyo.
Now I noticed how Sam said that eventually all elemantals have to go to the other realm or die a mortal but for Kagome that was a long time from now. Does this mean she has to make that decision one day? That she will leave Sesshomaru and her son?
Nala (Chapter 9) - Sun 03 Mar 2013
please keep writing you r doing a grear job!
mari (Chapter 9) - Sat 02 Mar 2013
i love this story thanks.
Keep it coming.
Great chapter! The whole elemental thing is a good addition to the story, and I LOVE anything that has to do with nature and the elements. Up date soon please.
Lauren (Chapter 8) - Sun 13 Jan 2013
Glad your back! Hope you had a great holiday season.
Wasn't Kagome chained to the bed? And why didn't Sesshomaru charge into Kagome's room to protect them/see who the intruder was? Isn't their son to be guarded?
I love your story and I can't wait to see where you go with it.
Maryssa (Chapter 8) - Sun 13 Jan 2013
I love it please keep it coming
Keep it coming, Happy New Year!
New story, excited to see it unravel.
The whole chaining to bed thing was pretty kinky ;) but it's okay, I like kink.
Arcane (Chapter 7) - Tue 11 Dec 2012
| I agree with Sara's comments: You desperately need a beta. The newest spelling/tense/grammar issues were pretty bad in this newest chapter. Don't get me wrong: I love the story concept, but the grammar (if I were to give it a rating of 1 to 10) would be a four. I would suggest finding a very good beta and examining their edits so you may improve your craft in your future works. It took me two years of reading other fanfiction stories constantly to improve my own writing and grammar, so while it might be an arduous process, it is definitely worth the extra work.
I hope to see more from you in future and hope that you take this as constructive criticism to help you improve your writing. Good luck!
Keep it coming.
Oh god, that was funny! I can't believe she actually got chained to the bed because he thought she was trying to drown herself!
Great chapter, so glad to see another chapter up so soon after the last one.
Up date soon
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