Yes! She made it through the well. Not so yay, she came back to a completely destroyed...I was going to say Tokyo, but let's go with the entire world. I did find it very interesting that the evil beings escaped the jewel. I'd never thought of that before. I wonder how the well's powers affected the jewel so that they could even escape. It must have been a nice, if brief, reprieve for Midoriko. Though it might be a nice thing to have pure powers backing you up and weakening the demons rather than evil backing up the demons, it must be exhilarating to have no battle to fight at all. *sigh* Poor Kagome. Back to Sesshou, she must go. I really do feel bad for her, though. Every move she makes affects the jewel in some way or rather could affect it, thereby affecting her life. I can understand wanting control over her life after so much time chasing the jewel, having no choice in the matter, lest she end up living with the guilt for the rest of her life. That would definitely feel like a lack of control over things. The lack of control there, affected her home life and her grades in school, her other life in the feudal era left her no choice but to lie about it and distancing her from everything there. Now, she has been given no choice but to stay with Sesshoumaru and become stronger, or go to the future where everything is f'ed up because of her actions, thereby making her guilty again. It must be so sad, devastating really. I am loving it! lol, I'm so wrong. I can't help that I'm glad she has to be forced to crawl back to Sesshoumaru and tell him that he was right, and she was wrong, simply because I want her to stay with him and fall in love. :P You know, after the lengthy time of thorough beating that he calls training or during, that works too. Okay, I think I'm going to shut up now, before I end up writing a whole chapter on my loving feelings about this story.
--KD
Somehow I feel...like something bad is going to happen. I do want him to see her go home and then have something go wrong and she has to return....but it seems more like she will be embarrassed and devastated because the well won't work. I am so in love. His haughty demeanor when dealing with her is hilarious because of her reactions to it. I really enjoyed all the interaction between Toshiko and Kagome. Lol, she was afraid Kagome was a cruel lady with deadly powers. I guess it’s only funny to me because I know Kagome’s character, Toshiko didn’t. I am hoping to see another chapter soon.
--KD
Lumi (Chapter 2) - Sun 15 Apr 2012
Oh, you have me so excited to see how things are going to go wrong!
You've got a few grammatical errors scattered about. Mostly comma issues. No big deal, but I just thought you'd like to know.
The summary is what drew me in, but this chapter has me salivating and clawing at the door, begging for more. I loved every part of this chapter, from the layout to the lead in to the perceived future. The little argument that they had over the nonexistent chosen wish was so funny. Kagome was her same independent, take no orders self, and Sesshoumaru is still his I am superior, you are beneath me, do as I say attitude. Then Kagome's actions to flare her powers to show that she could take of herself ended up leading into everyone being knocked out. I feel so bad for them. The funniest part is his kidnapping her in the end. The little tidbit in the end where he refers to her being powerful was very nicely placed/done. I'll be watching for the update email. Happy Writing.
--KD
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