I'm Way past when I should be asleep so please forgive me if there are parts of this review that make little to no sense but after reading this chapter I couldn't NOT review! I could hardly wait either!
Although painful... the vivid imagery given to the extent of Sesshomaru's damages was awesome. You didn't have to describe each lasceration to show how really bad off he was with how long it was taking them to heal him and the continual changings and clensings. It really emphasized how strong Sesshomaru's youki was upon its release when he healed himself.
Speaking of which... Booyaka! Kagome has the most utterly loyal of guard dogs now! :happy dances: THAT'LL throw a monkey-wrench in Naraku's plans For Sure! I'm totally stoked!
I just hope it's not Kouga at the door and that if it IS... Sesshomaru doesn't take him out in his protection of Kagome.
Oh... and I'm totally loving their souls calling to each other. I hope to see more of that significance.
...and now... I crash. So tired. ^_^
Thanks so much for writing!
helikesitheymikey! (Chapter 4) - Wed 07 Mar 2012
I'm a wee bit worried about her condition of if she dies her closest kin gets the slave...first of all what's to stop her dad from killing her to get the slaves if he finds out about it? and who's her closest kin? would it be her brother or could one or both of her parents try to get the slaves? or they might try to manipulate her brother with having the slaves do what they*her parents* want...
SO...Shippo is a lil motormouth...I hope he didn't say too much info about it in case bad humans might try to find the freed slaves so that they can capture them and sell them or something...I hope Kagome sets up some kind of barrier around her property so that other mikos and monks who would hurt her friends won't be allowed in...sutras and other enchanted objects that would be used for bad too would be good to use a barries to keep out.
interesting story...wonder what Sesshomaru will think when he comes to...and when they get back to the cottage. SO...Kagome has a denmother or something at her cottage to care for the little ones? are there any other child youkai/hanyou on her property or will she start trying to get more kids to help her?
SO...since Naraku doesn't know about Shippo and Azure Kagome can free them but she can't free Sesshomaru or the female currently right?
Fascinating story so far. I love how you're bringing all the characters together -both canon and original.
I look forward to seeing how Sesshomaru will react upon meeting Kagome. Thankfully your Kagome is strong enough to be able to control him for the time it will likely take to calm him down enough to Listen. That is if he is not aware/awake to get some sense of it himself as she sees to it that he heals.
I shall have to re-read to check whether the Red she bought was one of the pups for whom Sesshomaru bartered. Their names mostly slipped to the wayside other than Azure's once I read them.
I DO wish you would go through your story for better spelling and grammar. Particularly mixed words: there/their/they're, your/you're, but especially using "holly" where "HOLY" should be. That last makes it very difficult, for me, to fully immerse within the story. Rather... it's much like hitting an invisible barrier while driving down the road: a jolt that makes one blink then readjust. Working on such things would greatly improve the story's quality.
Thanks for writing!
(Chapter 1) - Tue 06 Mar 2012
Niiice! I would love it of you could please continue this story. I love the way this story isstarting off. Pure Kagome meets the tainted Sesshomaru. Mmmmm this is gonna be a goooood story. Ppllllease continue this story for me!^-^
khandiland (Chapter 3) - Sun 04 Mar 2012
Awesome!!! Im really liking this story.
lonelylulaby (Chapter 1) - Sat 03 Mar 2012
You have to continue this story. I think it has great and wonderful potential
ja ne till next time and keep up the good work
(Chapter 2) - Sat 03 Mar 2012
I would really like you to continue this.
Roxette (Chapter 1) - Sat 03 Mar 2012
Beautifull! i can't wait for the next chapter !
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