Keep it coming.
Hi!! first, great story! I am really enjoying it.
However as you stated in your opening you do seem to have troubles with a few words.
I'd like to give you some little bits of advice that may be of help.
their - used when talking about people
there - places about 90%of the time you are using their not there.
wear - wearing clothes etc...95% of the time you should be using this one not the next one.
ware - things that are being sold.
cloth(s) - material, bolts of fabric etc...
clothes - things you wear to cover up! ;)
Good luck with the rest of the story, I'm looking forward to it!
(Chapter 9) - Sun 08 Jul 2012
*simply wowwww.o.O keep doinq what your doinq... Im sure you've made your qrandmother proud.:)*
This story is interesting, keep it coming.
(Chapter 8) - Sun 17 Jun 2012
I hate it when I catch up cause then there is nothing left to read!
I really love this story. I'm sorry for not reviewing for every chapter but all I wanted to do was keep reading >.<
Maracuya-Chan (Chapter 8) - Thu 05 Apr 2012
Such a good chapter! I want more! I really hope you updates soon, I wanna know what happens next, you have me at the edge of my seat!
I really love this story. I can't wait to see what the next chapter will contain. Please keep up the wonderful work :)
j (Chapter 7) - Wed 28 Mar 2012
i looooveeee the story!!!
(Chapter 7) - Wed 28 Mar 2012
Wow...I'm not to sure what else I can say.
This story really got my blood going. I rarely fine many fics anymore that actually have the level of creativeness/writting that yours does.
I am very happy with this fic so far and cannot wait to read more that you come up with.
Its great that you have Kagome as cunning and bright, it makes the fic seem more real that she stands up to what she believes is right and not just letting things happen around her. I highly dislike all the fics to where she is pretty much a blundering idiot that only screams and wines all the time. I love when she has more of a realistic personality.
I know the whole "youkai slave" theme has been used before but I am greatful that you have twisted it to put your own take on it.
I truly look forward to your next update, keep up the excelent work.
I really love this story, I can't wait for the next chapter and can't wait for some Kagome-Sesshomaru interaction!
Hanatsuki (Chapter 6) - Mon 19 Mar 2012
Beautiful, a nice take on the youkai enslaved plot. I adore the characters, and the addition of more members to Sesshomaru's family! I look forward to the next chapter!
I am loving this! more pleaase!!!
(Chapter 6) - Tue 13 Mar 2012
Interesting plot, but you need a beta. There are grammatical errors and incorrect word used. Don’t stop writing, you can only get better. Good luck!!
Beautifully sweet. I love how Sesshomaru picked up right away that Naraku was a bad seed. I am NOT looking forward to the spider's new plot. Not that anything he can say to Kagome's father will succeed in separating Kagome and Sesshomaru I suspect. Not with the way they're souls seem to be connected nor with the way she set his slave collar.
Thanks for writing!
I LOOOOVVEEE this story!! OMG I can't wait for the next chapter. Evil Naraku will eventually die by Sesshoumaru.. lol I can only hope!! -Cef
Heyya.. Actually, I haven't been on for a very long while and kinda miss this place where I can let my imagination run wild. You have a very interesting and lovely plot going on for you. LOVE THE STORY, BTW!! Hurry and continue. You have fire up my partially dead brain, my dear, and to stay dormant for too long might as well be my version of apocalypse. However, keep in mind that a dictionary at hand is always a great company when one is sceptical about ones own spelling and use of words. It may sound the same, however the spelling gave off different meaning and can easily confuse others. As well, shorter lines are much easier on the eyes. Observe other writers... I learned this the hard way. It will be a waste if such a great story is hard on the eye. Especially one such as I who is near/long sighted. However, keep on writing as your heart desires. You have a wonderful imagination. Love your story from the bottom of mine heart..
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