And the Journey Begins ^-^....well the Journy to Sesshoumaru's Shiro at least....but the start of a new chapter in the story of Sesshoumaru and Kagome no? ^-^
I like this story very much. I've two bits of advice for you.
You have your 'there' 'their' and 'they're' mixed up.
There- location. Ex. Will you move this bag over there for me, please?
Their- possesive. Ex. Their bag is the big yellow one.
They're- They-are. Ex. They're not going to admit it, but they like the leather bag better.
You also have some places where you're lacking comma usage.
Commas when talking to a person and their name is invovled. Ex.1 "Kags, can you help me over here?" Ex.2 "Damn it, Kags!"
These bits of advice will give you better flow.
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