Silly, silly, silly hanyou. His intentions are so going to fail. There are so many other females out there. Kikyou is DEAD, D-E-A-D, DEAD, in the past. I don't care how much history those two have. Move on, you puppy-eared knucklehead. It's a good thing Kagome has a lot of protection in the Western Palace, especially with ANOTHER brother. Looking forward to the next chapter.
interesting. i cant really beleive inuyasha attacked kagome and still thinks of her as his own, that sess stole her. he was run off from her. and another brother 0o0o0o0o more pelase!
Inuyasha, you do-do. All that for a jewel that has caused nothing but pain and misery to anyone who comes across it? Not worth it. Hope Sesshomaru finds his ass.
0o0o0o0o good upfate! watch out inuyasha!
Azumii (Chapter 2) - Thu 29 Dec 2011
I really like this story even if Sesshomaru is a big jerk. I notice a few mistakes and issues with the story... like Sesshomaru says he will never bind himself to Kagome but then the next sentence he says he will because she will change. It confused me. Also when she was being washed of Inuyashas scent and he saw her naked the sentence was there twice.
OTHERWISE, amazing. :D
xoxo
Sesshomaru sure is a demanding youkai. Haha. ;)
Diane (Chapter 2) - Thu 29 Dec 2011
The plot seems good. Needs work though, has quite a lot of errors, I think you only used where correctly once in the 1st chapter, everything else should have been were, where is place/location related & were is a form of was. Also it's not mam it's ma'am, a contraction of madam.
OOO very good ,i wonder just who was the one to give him his frist pups, and how do the scars look like
they mystery ooo
i love this story, seriously if you ever dont want it please let me know every time i read, my mind takes it places!
First chapter has piqued my interest, and now I'm looking forward to reading how the rest of the story will turn out. ^^
I think it's an interesting start. I would like to find out about these marks that Kagome is to have and how she will interact with his children. Right now, they seem like brats and Sesshoumaru a jacka$$. The whole hitting when she really didn't even speak disrespectfully threw him right into the bad guy group. I hope to see how this pans out. Just a few things:
Clothes means clothing.
Cloths means flexible fabric or textile
So we wear clothes and clothes are made from cloth, different cloths stiched together. So wherever it mentions her clothes, there should be an 'e'. Just thought I would point this out to you.
--Kaminoko
Wolfqueen01 (Chapter 1) - Mon 26 Dec 2011
Wow. Sessh is being a little round about in doing things. I like this please update this soon. :)
i like this fic! but a summary would probably give ytou more readers! please let me know if you ever wish to discontinue it or abandon i would gladly adopt! it gave me a darkish plunnie!
Hane Hane (Chapter 1) - Mon 26 Dec 2011
Very promising! Please update!
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