I like your story a lot (read 12 chapters in one sitting), but there are a few things you need to work on to make it better.
(1.) Don't use IM-speak, like "c ya". It just looks...immature.
(2.) Learn the difference between "your" and "you're". One is possessive, the other is a contraction of you+are.
(3.) Check your writing before posting. You have multiple instances of words missing from sentences or improper capitalization.
MissJess (Chapter 11) - Thu 05 Jan 2012
Great story! keep up the good work!
;_; I hope he gets there in time.
Venita (Chapter 11) - Wed 04 Jan 2012
I;m glad Sesshomaru finally admits he loves Kagome, please update soon.
headalphafemale (Chapter 2) - Sun 01 Jan 2012
Good story! At the beginning I was concerned I would have to read about the anime scene. But Im very glad you went on with your own story. I also was wondering, why? Kagome was forgetting so quickly about Inuyasha's condition when she treated Rin. But since she was a little human girl, it made sense to treat her first. Glad to see so far no one had to lay around for too long hurt or sick. But Sesshomaru badly wounded, OH! MY! I usually don't like Naraku, but do like the laugh. Thanks!
Venita (Chapter 10) - Sun 01 Jan 2012
Great chapter, Happy New Year!
:o
I'm on the edge of my seat. i want to know what happens. Poor Kaogme. ;_;
Venita (Chapter 9) - Wed 28 Dec 2011
Love the kiss between Kagome and Sesshomaru, please update soon. Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
Shadowstarprinces Pridestar (Chapter 8) - Mon 26 Dec 2011
where the next chapter
Venita (Chapter 8) - Thu 22 Dec 2011
This chapter was sad, please update soon.
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