That was certainly a different take on things! I liked it though, it was well written with good english, (makes all the difference, believe me) and your story idea was quite unique. It was saucy and risque without being vulgar and it just appealed.
After a description of Sango's lovemaking to Kagome that could only be described as umm, vigourous, I laughed out loud with this demure little line....
"There, how's that?" asked Sango coyly.
I loved that flip from utter wanton to coy in an instant. Nice comedic touch. Your description of Sesshoumaru's physical characteristics was one to make the heart flutter and I liked how you had him react to the situation right down to being decent enough to clean up everyone and leave them nicely plopped around the fire. I enjoyed your offering very much.
'twas a sweet dream indeed.
Isn't that an awesome-perfect victory for Sesshomaru? xD Steamy, sweet stuff !