The room suddenly feels hot (LOL).
Anyway, the idea is great, but I'm sorry to say this: This is too rushed. Besides, I think even the most saint woman would be mad if she is stood up while the said man/lover/husband is having... certain activities... with another woman. or women in this case. Sesshomaru needs some a**-whipping first before Kagome takes him back... but well, it's only my opinion.
Either way, I enjoy reading it!
Once again, you have such a great idea, but cram it into a one-shot. I know it's very difficult to write a chapter story and hard to stick with it - that's why I've only completed a handfull. But you've got so much going on that it could be broken up so that the ideas don't get so lost.
This is really a cute story and it sounds like Kagome's business is a day spa for the extremely stressed businesswoman. Nice!
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