Let me tell you, girlie, that for being 13 this story was very well written. When I read it no blaringly obvious errors popped out at me (which many find in adult stories too O_O)

Next time try to add a little background to Kagome though. Like... Everyone in the Inuyasha knows that Canon Kagome lives on a shrine. But where did she live in Tokyo? Does she miss her friends, had she even told anyone that she was leaving?

It's just small stuff, you can either do it or don't, won't hurt my feelings :p But like I said, very well written ;)

This is a really good start, and I'm looking forward to seeing what's gonna happen. Ballroom dance! I'm sure she's going ta meet Sess there. One thing I'm rather confuzzed about is, how did she get the air tickets that quickly?

interesting!