Reviews for Taken by Lynn

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Diane (Chapter 1) - Thu 12 Aug 2010

I like it overall, you do have a few gender problems refering to Kagome as he or him several times, you also need to remember what position you have them in, you have Sess putting her legs over his shoulders & then in the next paragraph Kagome slides her legs around his waist. You also have a very common mistake, you don't seem to know the difference between then & than, unless it's time related the correct word to use is than, you only use then correctly twice. When Kagome is compairing Sess's penis to her vibrator it should be than, than is ratio related like A is bigger, etc than B.


Lexie (Chapter 1) - Thu 12 Aug 2010

whoa *blinkblink* hehehe verra niiicce. are you going to continue or was this a oneshot?

please to be updating!!


MidNigh (Chapter 1) - Thu 12 Aug 2010

I really like this story! you should add more chapters...: )

 


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