Hey, that's a cliffhanger at the end of chapter 5! Sess brings her back to life, she feels a sharp pain, and falls unconscious again! Good thing there are more chapters up.....
This chapter explains why I think it's so wrong for Inuyasha and Kagome to end up together. He always chose Kikyo over Kagome, and overlooked how catty and nasty Kikyo treated Kagome. Even when Kikyo is gone for good, how can Kagome overlook that, and not feel like the second choice?
I loved your characterization of Kagura in this chapter. Also, nice and action-packed. Great writing!
Now that's the way to set a scene. Your first paragraph is just three sentences, but it draws a very vivid picture. Love your gift for description. Also love the nice, long chapter.
| I'm totally addicted to this story!!! I love it so much, and I can't wait for you to update
Maddie (Chapter 17) - Wed 14 Jan 2009
Great Job I loved this chapter. I was telling one of my friends about this story and she read it and now is addicted to it!!!!!!!! update ssssssssssssoooooooooooonnnnnnnnnnnnnnn.
Void Goddess (Chapter 17) - Wed 14 Jan 2009
| I love this story! I can't wait to see what happens in the next few chapters.
Stupid villagers! I'm glad that you rewarded Kagome later, however, with a sexy hot spring scene. Well done! *fans self*
Ashes (Chapter 16) - Sun 04 Jan 2009
Wow, nice chapter. The mob idea was interesting, the hint of citrus tasted yummy, and you have a solid lead in to the next chapter. Good job. I'm excited to read more.
Still love this story! Are you changing anything or just reposting?
AW555 (Chapter 16) - Sat 03 Jan 2009
| I'm glad you've update quite a bit since I last read this XD I had thought I read this before (and I had XD) but I think it was on another fan fiction site when I read it *Scratches head* Anyway! It's going very well ^.^ I really enoy it. Keep up the good work!
Anonymous (Chapter 16) - Sat 03 Jan 2009
WOW great chapter I love it. Keep the good work up. Update soon ^_^
Oooooh! Dun dun duuuunnnnn! I can't wait to read the next chapter! cliffhanger-fu, you have!
Maddie (Chapter 15) - Fri 26 Dec 2008
Great chapter. Happy after christmas and an All most new year ^_^
Ashes (Chapter 15) - Fri 26 Dec 2008
Tee hee. I like it. I was going to comment on something else but my brain refuses to cooperate, so I'll just go with the usual "can't wait for the next chapter" and keep checking up on your engaging story.
Happy (almost) New Years!
not here (Chapter 14) - Thu 18 Dec 2008
| i kindda luv the fact that this ain't a 'hole world out of da 'riginal storie. but how does da ice lord fall in luv wit da sprin' priness!?(sor'y for bein' blunt but i just start'd readin' this today, i was woundarin')
Maddie (Chapter 14) - Thu 18 Dec 2008
Wow the next chapter should be really interesting can't wait!!! ^_^
Ahhh! That Naraku is such a right bastard! You update so quickly, it's fabulous! I went to bed last night and just got up to two new chapters! (I'm in the UK, so time difference I guess?) And about what you said about flaws in your writing... I think everyone has flaws in their writing but the skill is to write a fluid story anyway, and you've done just that so far. Looking forward to more!
ignore my last review FOR chapter one....this one is for chapter 13.... i really do think you uploaded chapter 1 again, either that or my computer is spastic
......I think you re-uploaded chapter 1....its ok though....
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