): Only one complaint, which would be the lack of proper usage of words. You misspelled things like synch as sink... That's kinda bad, in my book. You also had consistant other mistakes that suggest English isn't your first language. Well, whether it is or not, I suggest you get an editor to run through here before winning the Dokuga awards. Amazing story, but the poor word usage and grammar mistakes detractd and distracted from the story. I look forward to the next chapter, in any case.
*poke syou* :3
Noacat (Chapter 1) - Tue 24 Nov 2009
*raises hand* Tenseiga can only be used once. You may want to explain this loophole in your story. I mean, it could be because there's something special about Kagome or whatever, but you should make it clear. *nodnod* Otherwise, anal retentive know-it-alls like me will be pulling their hair out. Sorry 'bout that, by the way. I can't stop myself...
i'm so glad you thought to bring this fic to Dokuga! i loves it! welcome to our site and happy story writing! - r0o
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