I thought this story was o.k.  I kept losing track of the different characters I think because there wasn't much of a backstory to explain who was who.  The song lyrics were fine at first but I think after a while it was too much.  some of the songs that the lyrics were specifically used against one of the characters I understand but Poker Face, for example could have just been mentioned I don't think it added much to the story.  I like the idea but I think it just needs to be tweaked a bit.

Songfics are a tricky business, as inserting a songs lyrics tends to fill up the chapter, and distracts the reader from the story you are trying to tell. Your story would benefit greatly if you filled in everything with more details, and checked over your spelling and grammar once again. You have the skeleton of a good story in the works here and with a little work it can grow into and awsome story. Keep up the good work!

This fic deffinately has potential but it just needs a little touching up. Elaborate more for flow. Double check to make sure there are no missed words, misspellings, and check for grammar and punctuation. Kudo's for adding Midoriko!

I found this fic to read more like the outline for a story than an actual story. You have details that are great, but I think over used in some spots. Watch out for your grammar.  I would love to see you expand on the ideas. I felt the songs actaually took a lot away from the story. You have  a good idea, but I think it needs to mature and expand.

~Teana

I don't usually read song fics, but I think this one has potential. However, I think the lyrics took up too mcuh space, and what seemed like a really long chapter was actually quite short. In addition, there were a few places where you left words out, a few misspelt words, and a couple of words that were used that didn't quite make sense. Clef was an interesting OC, though, and I liked how you used Midoriko, Kaguya, Hakudoushi and Akago, as they are usually overlooked. I suggest getting a beta-reader to go through and check for mistakes. There's a section in the forum to help people find betas, and they can really improve the quality of a fic. The storyline has potential, though, and I would like to see what happens next!

I'm not really one for song fics, but I think this could be an interesting idea.  I love how Midoriko was added, you don't see her in many stories really.  Well other than a quick cameo anyways.  There are some grammar issues to watch out for, including missing words, incorrect words and misspelled words.  I would recommend getting a beta to help catch some of the mistakes.