| Poor Sesshy's home sick. Awww. Another great chapter. Can't wait to read the next one!
Miss.Undo (Chapter 6) - Sat 11 Jul 2009
| Please update soon I like where this is going. lol ")
faby (Chapter 5) - Sat 11 Jul 2009
| alright... no wait it's... a funny
| I love this story! I love the way Sess is interacting with Kagome's friends, and that he is developing longings for Kagome. Your citrusy passage in the last chapter was very nice, by the way. It conveyed so much about how he feels about Kagome, and the shame of contemplating mating a human, and having desires for one. Very good! I wonder if he had any feelings for her when she was with Inuyasha? Please, update soon. I'm so looking forward to reading more!
| I like the way you describe the settings. The way you described the rain starting in the feudal era, the big thunderstorm in the modern era, and the trip to go shopping, were all perfectly written. I can imagine exactly what it was like, based on your writing. And I also like the way you are characterizing Kagome, Sesshomaru, and Kagome's mother. Kagome and Sesshomaru are kind of similar in the anime, because they are intelligent, brave, and reasonable, yet have tempers. You wrote Kagome's mom just right. She would absolutely decide that the best thing to do would be to simply walk into the high school and try to enroll Sesshomaru, all 6'5" of him, ankle-length hair, tribal tattoos, and all. Though this IS Tokyo we are talking about here. They are into some freakish stuff! HaHa! I'm loving this!
| It really wasn't Kagome's fault. I can imagine Sesshomaru reacting either way to being trapped in the future. Reasonable, like you portrayed him, or blaming Kagome. It will be interesting to see how he fits in to the modern era...
| Yes! What an awesome beginning! I can tell this is going to be one of the great ones!
loveless (Chapter 4) - Fri 10 Jul 2009
| Interesting. I want to read more so please update soon.
stars (Chapter 4) - Thu 09 Jul 2009
| please updata
BluMystique (Chapter 4) - Thu 09 Jul 2009
| Some constructive criticism.
This is a very good and promising story so far. My only suggestion, is to get a beta reader. You have some grammatical errors here and there (i.e "sense" when it should be "since") that's a bit distracting. Otherwise everything else is pretty good. Looking forward to the next chapter
stars (Chapter 3) - Wed 08 Jul 2009
| please updata
Dandie (Chapter 3) - Tue 07 Jul 2009
| Excellent. I like it. But I don't think that Sesshoumaru looks like a high schooler... though i would love for him to go to school with me! *drool* O.O. LoL. Looking forward to your next chapter. ^_^
pauly (Chapter 3) - Tue 07 Jul 2009
Nice story, it's actually a change that for once he has to start from the beginning including schooling. Great story
river (Chapter 2) - Thu 02 Jul 2009
| Quick note... "Feudal Era", not "Futile Era".
Dandie (Chapter 2) - Thu 02 Jul 2009
| Oooo. I like it so far. Very interesting. Sesshoumaru stuck in the future. Oh, and by the way, it's the Feudal Era. I believe that's the correct spelling. Anyways! ^_^, Great job, Can't wait to read more.
Alpine (Chapter 1) - Fri 26 Jun 2009
| Awesome... I know that's not very constructive but it's only one chapter.. I will be watching for more
Hugs ~_^
favi (Chapter 1) - Fri 26 Jun 2009
| OH MI GOSH!!! I hope u write a new one!
| I really enjoyed this 1st chapter I hope to see more soon
katlady (Chapter 1) - Fri 26 Jun 2009
| interesting cant wait to see were you go with this
A Little Birdie (Chapter 1) - Fri 26 Jun 2009
| Interesting start. I can't wait to see what you do with it!
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