Now thats better, i like the 'rewind' concept! Enjoyed this chapter greatly, it shows Sesshomaru really wants Kagome at his side, and isn't doing this just for an heir, or to piss off Inuyasha when he wakes!
Keep up the good work!!
I love the idea of this story, the only thing that I did not enjoy was that there was only three chapters, update when you get a chance please?????
| Awesome!!!! Creative, imaginative, vivid. I didn't spot much in the way of spelling or grammar errors, I wouldn't worry about it if I were you. This is a fascinating story, please keep updating!
Ladydot (Chapter 3) - Wed 03 Jun 2009
Bravo! Bravo! I love this story so much and it keeps getting better. I really hope she can come to learn to love sesh...i would in a heartbeat! :) I'm so excited to find out the reasons of why she isn't pupped yet (from chapter 2) Hope we start to find that out soon. Looking forward to another grand chapter -Ladydot
I'm kinda glad you jumped a couple of years, but then at the same time you missed out on all the really good stuff in between!
However i did enjoy this chapter and do look forward to the next, as i want to see what Sesshomaru does!
Thanks for the update!!
Fairqueen (Chapter 2) - Tue 02 Jun 2009
still a good story. i am fineing myself waiting for the next chapter. keep up the great story line
Sala (Chapter 1) - Mon 01 Jun 2009
You use a mixture of tenses while writing. If English is not your first language, I would suggest asking a native English speaker to beta your fan fiction before posting it.
I love it! Its now going on my favorites list ^-^ I hope you update soon!!
Vicky (Chapter 2) - Mon 01 Jun 2009
The premise of the story sounds interesting. I can't wait to read the next chapter. I think you write well considering English is not your first or second language. Please update soon.
Vicky (Chapter 2) - Mon 01 Jun 2009
The premise of the story sounds interesting. I can't wait to read the next chapter. I think you write well considering English is not your first or second language. Please update soon.
kouga78 (Chapter 1) - Mon 01 Jun 2009
| Very good! leaves me wanting to read more. I love how this stays true to the characters with kagome being devoted to inuyasha and sesshomaru well... just being sesshomaru. Sometimes some sad/bad endings and beginnings are needed for the story to work! I really am tired of the ones with kagome being the naive girl that instantly falls hopelessly in love with sesshomaru and leaves inuyasha without a second thought. this one is really different and it will be interesting to read how their relationship progresses and how the sesshomaru, kagome and inuyasha triangle will play out. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!
P.S sorry for ranting so long.
| Yes, make it a long story. I love long stories! And this one is soooo interesting, I can't wait for more.
Ladydot (Chapter 2) - Mon 01 Jun 2009
I really enjoy this story so much! Its a brilliant plot and i really can't wait to see what happens next. You are doing an amazing job writing this in english when its not even your second language! I hardly saw any mistakes. Keep up the wonderful work and I'll be watching for the next chapter :)
Please continue!
loveyaa1210 (Chapter 1) - Mon 01 Jun 2009
I enjoyed the story so far, it has quite an interesting spin on it. You have gotten my attention and I look forward to the next time/part :)
| Excelent first chapter!Please update soon!This story is great!!
Fairqueen (Chapter 1) - Mon 01 Jun 2009
very good . some spelling errors,but who am i to talk about that . The story is very good and has me waiting and wanting more so please update soon and often.
I like this!!! This is deffinately different than anything i have read before!!!
| OOOHhhh I would be more than happy to bring forth a life for the very very very eatalicious Sesshoumaru yes in deed I can see them now... What you think I would stop at one... Lol Great start please continue
OMG! Yes you most definitely should continue with this! No way can you stop it there, it just got good!!
Kagome has accepted Sesshomaru's offer without knowing what he truly wanted, and i really want to see how this plays out, as well as seeing if Sango and Miroku get better, and then how Inuyasha's going to react once he's revived!!
There's way too many loose ends you can't end it there!*whimper*
Besides i thought this was very well written, a good story line twist plot, and i really want to read more!!
Keep it up!!
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