Hello,
I will admit to being a fan of your stories for some time. I look forward to the continuation and completion of each work that you have in progress as they are all a joy to read and re-read. I love the strength of the relationship and bond between Kagome and Sesshoumaru in this particular version of things. Though I do have to chuckle a little bit at the name of Kagome's condition, demonits. Though since the primary result of this condition seems to be full blooded demon offspring as well as a 'heat' that calls to and attracts youkai, it makes me wonder if it's not linked to the strength of her abilites as a Miko. it makes sense that supernatural powers are drawn to supernatural powers and the result is equally powerfull children instead of a dilluted bloodline. But I'm getting all technical, sorry but I like to play with theories.
I will admit to being a little saddened at Inuyasha's poor character. While I don't like him as a match for Kagome, I hate to think that he is completely irredeamable. Granted with his spoilt upbringing in this AU, you've given ample reason for his utter crassness and cruelty. Though I wonder if there might be a way to curb his blind cruelty. What if it wasn't just his spoilt nature at work here but also the cannon fact that hanyou blood causes instability where he can loose his mind to the animalistic nature of his youkai half? If he could be given something as an anchor like his sword in the anime, (though something fitting for modern times) maybe he could be allowed to see reason. I know it sounds like I'm fighting for him, and in a way I guess I am, but it's just the extreams he's going to in this make me think this isn't normal. He emotionaly abused Kagome and then abandoned her for over 9 years and expected her to be waiting. I don't know if his sense of time is messed up because of his own long lifespan but according to this AU he was only born a few decades ago so that doesn't seem to fit to well. Then he's willing to rape a pregnate woman. As hot tempered and crude as Inuyasha was in cannon, I don't think he'd deliberately hurt a female that way. Though my argument is based on Canon examples in the anime and you have every right to take things in the direction you want to go. Though if you want to keep inuyasha the evil character you've portrayed, another option is to have Sesshoumaru use Inuyasha's night of weekness (where he turns human for a night) to drive a few points home. Maybe some time where he won't heal as quickly will teach him as he seems to like to learn things the hard way. Granted if that's the case Kagome could also purify him, maybe turn him human for a longer stint than a night until his youki naturally replenishes. Or he could get a taste of his own medicine, realizing that Kikyo is only using him the same way he uses others. Swallowing such a bitter pill will put the shoe on the other foot for him as she is his obession. Goodness, i've gone on a rant. I do appolgize but I just thought you'd appreciate the feedback and maybe I've spawned an inspirational plot device to drive any of your works forward.
I also like how you include the relationships of the other character and even give them conflicts to work out or show their dynamics to keep all the characters filled out instead of just being accessories to the main focus here. I do hope Sango works through her insecurities though part of me is thinking she should get counciling. It seems, she's had a long time to estabilish trust with Hiten and it's still not there. Either Miroku really did a number on her or it just reinforced previous negative experiences in her past. That could be a very interesting side story if you choose to develope it.
Anyway, do take care and I hope you keep finding the drive to continue writing.
Tiffany (Chapter 9) - Fri 09 Jul 2010
NEVERMIND! I found it. Strange, I could have sworn it was part of Trapped, but I guess now.
O: When you said it might be awhile until the next chapter, you weren't kidding. It's been over 6 months! D: Please update soon =]
stars (Chapter 9) - Tue 02 Feb 2010
please updata
Why can't Sesshou have an old fashioned duel with Inuyasha to end this? That way Inuyasha can get some common sense beaten into him. And I wonder how successful the Northern lord's plan will be if he's planning on using Inuyasha to bring Sesshou down. I really hope they don't succeed and that Inuyasha gets what he deserves. Keep up the good work and update soon :P
Ha! I knew that Northern Lord was going to show up again... I can just picture Sesshomaru, red as a lobster. So happy to find an update on this amazing story!
FairQueen (Chapter 9) - Fri 29 Jan 2010
i love this story i had lost it. but am so happy i found it again. please up-date as soon as u can i so enjoy this story. inuyasha needs to get his ass kicked from here to next week and back again
ty for continuing this story :)
I found it! I for the life of me could not remember the title to this story. So therefore i could not read it. And low and behold your update. I loved this story when you started it and love it even now. Welcome back! :)
Bell (Chapter 9) - Fri 29 Jan 2010
Man I can't wait to see what sesshoumaru does to inuyasha! Great couple of new chapters! Keep up the great work...
lmao a red Sesshomaru =x hahahahah this is awesome ^_^ stupid Yusha!
O_O YOU NEED TO UPDATE THE NEXT CHAPTER!!! *POUNCE SYOU WITH CRAZY C0OKIENIESS* UPDATES!!!!
Lexie (Chapter 2) - Mon 21 Dec 2009
hahaha! loving that last comment! please update its very interesting.
jane (Chapter 2) - Thu 04 Jun 2009
i really loved this story on a single spark and i'm glad you posted it here. i really hope you'll continue with this story. your writing is fantastic, keep up the good work.
Adriana (Chapter 2) - Sun 24 May 2009
lol custard all over his lap.. that's an inventive way to start something. ^_^
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