LMAO, that spider was totally Naraku in disguise!! I loved this update, a bit short though and not much happened but still much enjoyed, thank you and can't wait for your next update!!
Uh, gawd! I am so horribly ashamed of myself right now. I got so caught up in reading this amazing story that I didn't realize I had yet to review... until I reached the last chapter. So sorry!
Ahem, so, to make up or my negligence as a reader, I will now leave a lengthy review describing how incredible I think this fic is!!
Firstly, I just want to tell you how beautiful I think your writing style is. Your vocabulary is far from simple, but I like the fact that you are not hung up on using ridiculously big, uncommon words that have people pausing and going, 'Huh, wtf does that mean?!' Not only do I feel like this interrupts the flow of the story (as readers usually have to stop and make a quick trip to grab their dictionaries), but I think that it reduces the quality of the overall story by making it seem like the author is trying to overcompensate. So, bravo for not making that mistake!!
The plot is wonderful and entirely original. Usually you hear about the entire group going to Sesshomaru for help with something, or the taiyoukai seeking Kagome's assistance for a certain task... but I don't know if I've ever read a story in which the miko instigates the truce ALONE. If I have read one... it obviously was not that memorable. I think this went on my favorites list like ten seconds after I started reading it. So, good job with originality.
I also enjoy how you are able to describe our heroine as being beautiful while still giving her a few characteristic flaws. Stories that describe Kagome as being completely and utterly perfect and all powerful are highly unbelievable.*cough cough guilty of doing this myself in the past cough cough*
As for Sesshomaru... I like that you have kept him in character in regards to his manner of speech. It's always a bit of a turn off to me when I read a story and Sesshomaru is portrayed as being really 'chatty', or his dialogue is off. Kudos to you.
The story is progressing so nicely, and I congratulate you for winning the award for best acion/adventure. You certainly deserve it.
My favorite thing about this story - while I do love everything about it - has got to be the humor. Kagome's twisted, silly inner dialogue and constant bouts of nonsensical ranting are very refreshing and entirely believable.
Everything fits together so nicely, and I think you did a marvelous job with the evolution of their relationship. It's so wonderful, and amazing, and fantastic, and pretty, and shiny, and... and... all manner of other positive things!! I'm sure there's more that I've forgotten to write, but it'll come to me again in time and I'll leave another review.
You have NO IDEA how excited I was to find a good story that has not been abandoned. There are waaaay too many of those kicking around, and it makes me a bit mad when I read a good story only to find out that it will remain forever unfinished. It seems as though good authors who care enough to finish their stories are in short supply. I can understand in certain circumstances, but I think a lot of it pans out to laziness. Pfft, then again, I probably have no right to bitch. While I would never leave a story unfinished, I am awful at taking forever with updates. I do try to post once every week or so, but a lot of the time it just doesn't happen and my brain refuses to switch over into 'writer mode'. Plus... I'm a Gemini, and I have a horrible tendency to put things off. Ugh, ranting!! Blah, blah, blah...
One last thing before I go... was your beta on vacation by chance? :P I'm just messin' with you, but there were a few little things that I noticed in this chapter. There were a couple of time's where you forgot to use a capital (beginnings of sentences and names and whatnot), and once or twice when you accidentally used a word twice in a row. That's not really a big deal, but there was one part in here where you described Sesshomaru using his 'hands and thumbs' when he was trying to console Kagome... Did he get his other arm back, or was that just a boo-boo?
Anywho, enough talking for now. I really look forward to your next update!!
Just stumbed upon your story ... I loves it!!! I am really nervous about the whole Inuyasha and Sesshoumaru thing AHHHHHH!!! We need Kags and Sesshy lovie dovie! Great story cant wait to read more soon!
"You surely have inherited our father’s wisdom; I, unfortunately, have only inherited his voodoo.”
Best line ever :)
Thank you for extending the chapter. Golly, Inuyasha is really acting like an idiot. Things are certainly a bit awkward now. Plus, when Kagome talks to him, how is she going to deny that she has feelings for Sesshoumaru when she knows that's not true anymore? Either way someone's going to get rejected...and it better be Inuyasha, that's all I can say <_< lol I think having Kagome lie to him about her feelings for Sesh would be totally OOC at this point, even if she hasn't yet fully come to terms with her feelings. This whole thing started because of her well-meaning urge to get Inuyasha on board. So I hope she keeps the trend and is honest with him. I hope her talk with him doesn't go too horribly...all thought this chapter doesn't lend much hope of it going well -_- Having her spend the night in Sesshoumaru's bed and subsequently carrying a lot of his scent could make things interesting if she talks to Inuyasha in the morning, hehehe. That could be fun. Hehe, poor Kagome...she's really setting herself up to fail.
*sigh* Oh the angst and drama. I think Inuyasha is being written a little more stupidly than he actually is. I understand the being heartbroken part and him jumping to conclusions. But his other behavior, the paranoia is kinda of OOC. He's stubborn as all hell, thats for sure, and he'd definately want to believe his brother is not someone to be trusted...but he was kinda of acting more schizo than I expected him too. It's frustrating...but admittedly it does add to the melodrama. But maybe you should think about dialing it back a notch. You don't wanna drive him too far off the deep end. (...Or do you, you evil little thing, hehehe)
Plus I hope Kagome doesn't let herself get walked on <_< Sure she's due a mental breakdown, that was fine. Having Inuyasha rub all her mistakes in her face was pretty harsh. Especially about the jewel shards. It must be hard for her to have made such a big mistake, one that's hurt so many people. But I hope you don't write off her spunk and perseverance. Inuyasha is acting like a moron. He's the one who jumped to conclusions. She shouldn't beat herself up over it <_< Plus, breaking the jewel was her fault, but its not her fault that the creatures using the shards are weak and susceptible to its corruption. I think she earned her lil breakdown, but I hope now that it's out of her system, she'll get her fighting spirit back.
You did a really good job of displaying all the hurt and confusion that can come with a misunderstanding of that magnitude. Ah the road to ruin is paved with good intentions -_- Poor Kags.
Thank you for the update, and keep up the good work!
kittybark08 (Chapter 26) - Thu 15 Jul 2010
This story continues to keep me on my toes. I hop eanother updat is coming, and soon! Great job!
♥♥♥Awwwwww come on! I just found this story and spent half the day reading it and you just go and end it like that? XD I NEED to know what haapens now! lol please please please please *5 hours later* PLEASE UPDATE SOON!! ♥♥♥
loveyaa (Chapter 26) - Wed 14 Jul 2010
Lovely. I liked the beginning of this chapter more, but I think that I liked Kagome's speech on love better in the old chapter. Anyway, I look forward to seeing if love conquers all. The continuation of Kagome's quests should be interesting, not only does she have to balance those but she has to balance (loving) the brothers as well. Lets see which of the three admits their feelings first. til next time :)
Inuyasha is dumb, dumber, dumbest. Kagome is that, too, if she keeps trying to hold onto her fantasy of being in love with him.
miss.undo (Chapter 26) - Wed 14 Jul 2010
i love please update soon. ")
JenJenMignightMaiden (Chapter 26) - Wed 14 Jul 2010
I usually review on fanfiction, but it wasn't updated yet. Anyway....GREAT CHAPTER. I'm kinda worried for Inuyasha though, he did went livid and crazy, not that I blame him, thinking that he lost his love to his full fledge demon brother AGAIN! I'm glad that things are progressing between our favorite demon lord and miko. Hope you update soon!
L-desu (Chapter 26) - Wed 14 Jul 2010
lol i love ur little rhymes, even tho u called us a ho. =P welcome back! and what a great chapter to come back to. a lot of plot development here. can't wait for the next one already!
This chapter made my heart go *boom boom boom boom boom* throughout the whole thing! I loved it! I think that this version was much much much better than the other one! thank yoooou so much!! I'm in love with this story and I seriously can't wait for the next chapter!! =D
I never read the original version of this, so it's all new and sparkling to me anyways. Poor Inu-chan. He's so dense at times, it's sad. Can't wait to see the result since Kago slept in Sesshy's room. Ackward. Let's hope the drama unfolds in somewhat dignified manner and Kago doesn't completely go bonkers before this is all over. Well my head is pounding, I have to end this review before I fall out the chair, Love it!! Can't wait for more.
hola (Chapter 26) - Wed 14 Jul 2010
Ooooooo, newish chapter! i thought i was going crazy when i saw this was updated.. i was like, 'wait a minute, that cant be right...', but you just updated the latest chapter, and i likes it! i really like the new explanation kagome gives for what love is. it's good! i'm glad you went through and spruced things up a bit! new chapter soon? :)
im in love with this story. im in love with your brain for coming up with this story.
i cant wait for more. keep up the good work.
martha (Chapter 26) - Wed 02 Jun 2010
I am in love with your story ,
Glad you decided to share
Your rhymes are really funny,
And are a treat to read.
Okay not that great at it but no serious I really love this so far and can't wait for the next chapter
I LOVE this story. It's the bset Kagoma portrayal AND a pretty kickass Sesshoumaru portrayal, please please please please PLEASE update soon! I'm addicted!!
OfCakeAndIceCream (Chapter 26) - Thu 27 May 2010
Wow! Awesome chapter so glad I started reading this fic! Hope you update soon!
This story is really entertaining. Although I do think the whole love thing might be happening a bit fast, it doesn't really hurt anything. Kagome's little internal rants are funny as hell. You're very good at the witty bantering. The sexual tension in the previous chapters was very well done too. Maybe that's why I feel the love thing is happening too fast, because the tension of figuring out their feelings is just so much fun. I think it could balance things out more if we saw Kagome's side of things more. We're getting a good glimpse of Sesshouamru's inner workings, but so far Kagome has only really displayed friendship towards Sesshoumaru and an attraction that's she's been in denial about. And in this last chapter for her to vehemetly deny her feelings for Sesshoumaru to Inuyasha, then turn around and wonder if she's actually in love with Sesshoumaru just feel a little dishonest. So maybe if she as less disbelieving about that Sessh cares about her, it would be a smoother transition into her realization that she might have feelings for him. I do love a good love triangle, though, so kudos for that ;) Maybe I'm looking at it from the wrong perspective. Maybe the fact that she's a bit oblivious and she's handling her feelings a bit messily adds to the rustic realism of things. She is kind of inexperienced after all. I just hate seeing Sesshoumaru in a role where his feelings are slightly unrequited. Kagome's denial of everything tha'ts passed between them when she was fighting with Inuyasha felt...unfair. It made me sad for Sesshoumaru :( Poor hot demon lord. hehe. But anyways, I'm sure it will all work out :) I look forward to the next chapter. Keep up the good work!!!
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