To be perfectly honest I wouldn't read your fanfic if it wasn't recomended as I've already read an original one. But what a surprise! And from the very begining! Your writing style is so vivid and colorful, not flat at all. It's, hmm, like a good cup of spiced fruit drink - the kind my mum does - when you think you' ve got all flavours recognized, there is something more to discover.
So anyway, I'm definitely your fan. I think that plot is very good, and the idea with ragged diary and as a result few entries is to my liking (I am not sure if it was in original one). I also like how Kagome is jumping from one time to another - this is how human mind works, at least for me. Doesn't it for us all?
Sesshoumaru is sometimes a little bit OOC and at the very begining his comments were anoying but after a while I decided it's ok as long as nobody notices - except readers :) . What I mean, he is so expresionless and stoic in anime and manga so the total change would be weird. On the other hand the idea of Him having many different feelings opens so many opportunities. He is quite cute :)
I also like that he is not so much demonic. I really detest the inner demon-self concept that have linear, vulgar mind (My bitch!, get the bitch etc). Don't get me wrong - your Sesshoumaru is not a copy of a human mind. That was indicated in a love making scene and I like it. I am really curious how his character and demonic culture will be explored and explained. I also want to know more of Kagome. The more fanfics I read the weakest she seems or quite the contrary, super hero she becomes. I dislike both, the former and the latter. So I am very eager to read more about her. But maybe I want to much?
Hopefuly, we - all of your fans will soon have occasion to read more :)
Good luck and please keep writing!
Ps: I forgot to mention another thing I admire. I don't feel a lot of american (or western) culture in your work. Sometimes autors by accident contain a lot of it, even when they try to avoid it. I am not certain if you would understand but I hope it will stay that way. Kagome and her world is 'eastern' and I don't mean the customs etc but rather outlook on life and a specific mood.
this is a reallllllllllllllly good story. I hope you will write again soon
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