First of all!
I love this. In fanfiction, we kind of have some fairly similar plot devices that we recycle in various forms. Your story is extremely original. It kind of brings in a more magical element which RT only brought in when it was convenient for her.
In the first chapters, I liked her flight, it was very suspenseful in a way, and her dreams, very hot.
It's always strange when two people misunderstand each other so completely, and with each of their powers, you can tell it was really hard on both of them. Sesshoumaru was hurt for what happened to him, and what he had to endure, and she was hurt because she felt he betrayed her.
You have a really nice balance of magic, action, and angst going on here.It gives the story an almost alive feeling feeling because in a lot of stories, going into it, or by the 1st, 2nd, 3rd chapter, you can kind of predict at least what genre the author is going to anchor the story in. Your story is a nice mix of several genres that I really like and they way you present them is lovely.
Keep up the good work!
MissK
Thanks for the update, i really enjoy this story!
Things finally looked like they were getting somewhere, and 'BAM' the spiders got Sess! Can't wait to read the next one!!
MontiK (Chapter 5) - Mon 20 Apr 2009
Oh yay! *Happy dances* They're together again ^.^ I always love it when Sesshoumaru's humbled. Another awesome chapter! *huggles and lubs*
MontiK
Yay! They finally have started to resolve what went wrong. NOw the hard part, trying to get Sesshomaru's sentance lightened.
Awesome story, can't wait for the next one! Can't wait to find out why Sesshomaru did what he did and i can't believe her mother just gave her location out like that!
Looking forward to the next chapter!!
Sweet_Dark_Silence (Chapter 4) - Mon 06 Apr 2009
Yes!
*does the Updated Fanfic Dance*
*stops a moment and pouts*
Although it was a little short...
Oh well!!
I wonder why Sesshomaru did what he did.... He must have had a reason... Eek Her daughter's in hiding and she gives out her address?! >.< I can't wait to read more ^_^
Super, awesome, fantastic story! I can't wait for your next update!
Great story Smittee. Hope you update soon!
Sweet_Dark_Silence (Chapter 3) - Mon 23 Mar 2009
Come on, when are you going to update?
The wait is killing me!
Smittee I have only a few things that I can say. One, I wish you could just sit in front of your computer all day and write. Also Have I mentoned how much I love this story, if I was remiss then I apalogize. I flows perfectly and its so clear whats happening at that moment. OH ode to the Smittee. Post more soon please.
hugs and puppies
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