Reviews for Dark Desire by MoonlightD

daapatemysoul (Chapter 1) - Thu 15 Oct 2020

I have to say I'm not a fan of the whole step-siblings dynamic. It can be done well but that's very tricky and I wind up walking away from most stories with it as a plot point. Now, the idea of Kagome being practically family because and Uasha grew up together can have a similar feel and seems to be a bit easier to pull off without getting weird or creepy. That might be a better option. 

I agree with other reviewers that the opening of this story feels rushed. We jumped straight into the deep end without even realizing we were at a pool, so to speak.  But I do feel there's good potential here and I hope you take it further. 

D (Chapter 1) - Tue 13 Oct 2020

Like the comment before a little background would have been nice. Leaving a cliff hanger without the masterbation would jave been nice too. To get a feel for the story. Writing good and if done right the step siblings can work be a good story. Its been done in several other stories tastefully and will written even with lemon or smut chapters. Some of those are in my favorite stories section 

SmilingFool (Chapter 1) - Tue 13 Oct 2020

great start off though it should have a little bit of background before Sesshomaru becomes the perv he is....  Step-brother?  Guess its okay....  

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