Reviews for The Edge of Fire by Ashley

Natalia (Chapter 5) - Sat 11 Jan 2020

Can't wait for the next chapter 


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 5) - Fri 10 Jan 2020

This chapter was HOT, Happy New Year!


candy (Chapter 4) - Sun 26 May 2019

Please update this story soon. It's so good it needs to keep going.


candy (Chapter 4) - Sat 13 Oct 2018

I hope you update soon. 


Shayla (Chapter 4) - Sat 30 Jun 2018

The story has been really interesting so far..im hoping you will actually finish this story 


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 4) - Fri 29 Jun 2018

Hmm, a very intriguing story.  I think it was well written but for a few grammatical errors which I assume you are aware of.  ;)  lol

I like this story and your OCs are interesting.  I agree with one of the other reviewers that this story could use a little bit more complex development and, in my opinion, it seems to be flowing nicely and going in the right direction.  

Seeing that Kagome never formally introduced herself I am assuming that Sesshomaru and his advisors along with his commanding general Ryu knew her name prior to their meeting because perhaps they found out her name in their initial inquiries while searching for the fabled priestess.

I can certainly understand the fast aroused sexual interest and contact on Sesshomaru's part, mainly because of his heightened aggressive instincts from his beast to find a mate; it was likened in the sense of him going into heat...well anyway, this is in my opinion...lol :)

Kagome's reactions to Sesshomaru's advances seemed normal enough, on a baser level; after all there seemed to be a mutual attraction between them, and also to her credit, she did snap out of it in time before it went too far because otherwise they would've ended up being unintentionally mated...again in my opinion. :)  lol

Kagome also seemed to have knowledge in the ways of demon society and mating rituals.  I wonder if Kaede taught her this or if she found out the information on her own...hmmm?

Thank you for sharing your story and I'm looking forward to future updates...soon.

Well done!

Cheers!!!


Christine (Chapter 4) - Tue 26 Jun 2018

Great story! Can't wait to see what happens next. 


critique (Chapter 4) - Tue 26 Jun 2018

Hello, I just read up to this point of the story. I like your story so far and I can feel your excitement to post quickly and show the readers with your writing. I will advise that you use spell check, I'm not a grammar person but it helps the flow of a story. I know the reviewers are excited for you to post quickly because most stories do not get updated with any sort of speed here, but, I would like you to take your time. Trying to do things quickly can cause a story to lose balance. Take your time and develop your characters and the relationship they will build, this will get your readers more involved with your story. Sometimes you just need to take a break after writing and then come back to it with a fresh mind.

 

The only error I've seen as a loop hole is that Kagome never mentioned her name. Ryu just already knew it...  There are other things that I could nit pick about but I as a reader would love to see a more complex to your story. So good luck and keep up the good work.


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 4) - Mon 25 Jun 2018

Good chapter, please update the next chapter quickly!


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 3) - Sat 23 Jun 2018

Nice chapter, please update the next chapter quickly!


InumeT_FlyGirl (Chapter 3) - Sat 23 Jun 2018

I did like it.) keep it up!


Anna Grey (Chapter 3) - Sat 23 Jun 2018

Whoops, I feel so hot right now. Great job girl!!!!

can't wait till your next chapter. love!


LoveAndFaith (Chapter 2) - Thu 21 Jun 2018

Great story, please update the next chapter quickly!


Erica (Chapter 2) - Thu 21 Jun 2018

I like it so far


Tessitura (Chapter 2) - Thu 21 Jun 2018

Aw hell.  Kagome may be human but a woman knows when she has met the comfort of a dominating alpha. one that can provide security and make your knees weak with anticipation.


candy (Chapter 2) - Thu 21 Jun 2018

So far so good. Please update soon can't wait for more. 


Anna Grey (Chapter 1) - Thu 21 Jun 2018

When you said it's your first story, I didn't expect it to be thi good. Your story has sparked my interest so far, so pls carry on!

 


Toni (Chapter 2) - Thu 21 Jun 2018

for a first story you are doing very well  I like your story  looking forward to more chapters 


InumeT_FlyGirl (Chapter 1) - Wed 20 Jun 2018

im interested to see how this progresses! Good job! 


Danni (Chapter 1) - Wed 20 Jun 2018

Hi! you write very well, and I'm very interested in seeing how this progresses. I hope you update soon, I have so many questions!

Great Job


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