Reviews for Split by PriestessElena

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VS (Chapter 4) - Tue 10 Apr 2018

Hello,

I have to say I'm melting...this was such a sweet chapter!!! I love the interaction between Kagome and the kids. And your characterization of Inu and Yasha is absolut authentic: they are indeed two diffrent charachters but share at the same time common characteristics with our adult hanyou. Well done!!!

Just a suggestion: if you edit your previous chapters try also to correct this mistake: you tend to begin a sentence with a small letter.

I really look forward to your next update!

P.S. I know this is a strange question, but did you change your name?


cassandra (Chapter 4) - Mon 09 Apr 2018

Oh now this should be good. I can't wait to see how sesshomaru reacts when they tell him what happened. 


Debra (Chapter 4) - Mon 09 Apr 2018

Aww... the toddlers are so cute!! I can totally picture Kagome being all cuddly and motherly with them. I can’t wait for her to fill Sesshoumaru in on what has happened to InuYasha.


Tessitura (Chapter 4) - Mon 09 Apr 2018

oh this was a tease!!!


VS (Chapter 3) - Thu 29 Mar 2018

Hello,

 

I'm glad I could help ;) This is a really nice chapter and I'm glad to see that it is longer than the previous two!

 

But there is one thing I didn't get: do Inu and Yasha somehow know they have once been one? What exactly is their relationship?

 

I hope the gang will not find a solution soon, insted it would be nice  if you would continue to focus on the two children: who of them will develop faster, who is more clingy, who will feel the need to protect the other, or will they be rivals? ... stuff like that ... 

 

I hope there will also be a lot of fighting for Kagomes attention ;)

 

I really see forward to your next chapter!


VS (Chapter 1) - Wed 28 Mar 2018

I forgot to mention before: as far as I remember Puritysan was volunteering for being a Beta not so long ago...try to message her. There is also a section for authors who need a Beta, or volunteer to be one, in the Doguka Forum.

Good luck!


VS (Chapter 2) - Wed 28 Mar 2018

Hello,

 

first of all congratulations!!! It's absolute refreshing to read about a completely new idea! I have to say that I don't remember reading about a similar plot! Therefore I would like this story to not be abandoned, like so many others...

 

Honestly I find your writing style good, you do not need to hesitate and be afraid of what we would think, just keep going on ;)

 

The only suggestion I have: try to stay in the past forms, you switch between present and past forms... 

 

I look forward to your next update!


Nicole (Chapter 2) - Fri 23 Mar 2018

Nice please update soon


princess of the western lands (Chapter 2) - Fri 23 Mar 2018

I knew this would be a good story. I hope you find a beta reader. Your chapters have been good and clearly express what you want your readers to know. I'm looking forward to your next chapter.

 

Update soon onegai

 

Ja ne


cassandra (Chapter 2) - Fri 23 Mar 2018

Aw! I just adore these kinds of stories where he's changed to a cute little boy.  I'm curious to see how the little human inuyasha is going to act.


cassandra (Chapter 1) - Mon 19 Mar 2018

This sounds like it's going to be an awesome story! I can't wait to see what you have in store for us! 


Natalia (Chapter 1) - Sun 18 Mar 2018

Interesting idea never read it before! will be waiting for more

good luck!


roberta. (Chapter 1) - Sun 18 Mar 2018

Good first chapter Good luck I will be looking for the next chap please update soon.


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