Oh please, this is so good, you can't just leave it here! But does naraku know? He's part of the team right? But he's her friend now though..I think.....so....
Ugh. Toran's pissing me off. Damn cat.
So I've read this far, and while it's an okay read, I have to admit I've gotten a bit...bored with it. I'm sorry!! But this is almost exactly like Grease, something you never even credit, and you even type the phrase "hopelessly devoted" when Kagome goes outside during the sleepover -- not to mention the fact that you referenced a lot of the lines in the song, like "my head is saying, 'fool, forget him'". Anyway, to make a long story short, this is getting too Grease-based [the few variations are good, but you don't really take them to the next level, you know?].
I'll admit, though, that there are some good points to this story. I want to make sure you know that I'm not leaving a flame, just some constructive criticism and you shouldn't take offense to anything I write here. :] I love the way you write about Sesshoumaru's feelings for Kagome, and it makes me feel all jittery inside. I like the fact that he's her teacher and not a student, and I admit that I was surprised when I found that out.
But, like I said, the Grease thing is almost competely taking over this story, and you need to be more original if you want this to be a bigger success. Anyone can imagine Grease with Kagome and Sesshoumaru taking the places of Sandy and Danny, and anyone can see that Kagura is Rizzo and Naraku's a player and the girls are the Pink Ladies. So you have to prove to us readers that you can think of ideas on your own and carry them out. I think you can do it, so good luck with it! :]
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So I've read this far, and while it's an okay read, I have to admit I've gotten a bit...bored with it. I'm sorry!! But this is almost exactly like Grease, something you never even credit, and you even type the phrase "hopelessly devoted" when Kagome goes outside during the sleepover -- not to mention the fact that you referenced a lot of the lines in the song, like "my head is saying, 'fool, forget him'". Anyway, to make a long story short, this is getting too Grease-based [the few variations are good, but you don't really take them to the next level, you know?].
I'll admit, though, that there are some good points to this story. I want to make sure you know that I'm not leaving a flame, just some constructive criticism and you shouldn't take offense to anything I write here. :] I love the way you write about Sesshoumaru's feelings for Kagome, and it makes me feel all jittery inside. I like the fact that he's her teacher and not a student, and I admit that I was surprised when I found that out.
But, like I said, the Grease thing is almost competely taking over this story, and you need to be more original if you want this to be a bigger success. Anyone can imagine Grease with Kagome and Sesshoumaru taking the places of Sandy and Danny, and anyone can see that Kagura is Rizzo and Naraku's a player and the girls are the Pink Ladies. So you have to prove to us readers that you can think of ideas on your own and carry them out. I think you can do it, so good luck with it! :]
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So I've read this far, and while it's an okay read, I have to admit I've gotten a bit...bored with it. I'm sorry!! But this is almost exactly like Grease, something you never even credit, and you even type the phrase "hopelessly devoted" when Kagome goes outside during the sleepover -- not to mention the fact that you referenced a lot of the lines in the song, like "my head is saying, 'fool, forget him'". Anyway, to make a long story short, this is getting too Grease-based [the few variations are good, but you don't really take them to the next level, you know?].
I'll admit, though, that there are some good points to this story. I want to make sure you know that I'm not leaving a flame, just some constructive criticism and you shouldn't take offense to anything I write here. :] I love the way you write about Sesshoumaru's feelings for Kagome, and it makes me feel all jittery inside. I like the fact that he's her teacher and not a student, and I admit that I was surprised when I found that out.
But, like I said, the Grease thing is almost competely taking over this story, and you need to be more original if you want this to be a bigger success. Anyone can imagine Grease with Kagome and Sesshoumaru taking the places of Sandy and Danny, and anyone can see that Kagura is Rizzo and Naraku's a player and the girls are the Pink Ladies. So you have to prove to us readers that you can think of ideas on your own and carry them out. I think you can do it, so good luck with it! :]
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I'm new on this site but i know of you from others. I must say i dont generally go for the present time stories but i think it's wonderful how you've portrayed teenage angst with a generous helping of sexy (and by that i mean our beloved sesshy). Love the story, keep up the good work.
Anonymous (Chapter 15) - Mon 16 Feb 2009
OMG plz update this is grea I love it!!!!!!!!! PLZ PLZ PLZ
Sonhadora (Chapter 15) - Sat 07 Feb 2009
I thoroughly enjoyed this story and don't understand why more people didn't review it! It's a great take on a classic story, and I love where you went with it. Sesshoumaru as a teacher? I want to go to that school! XD But you had a great combination of high school drama, romance, and comedy. All in all, great work, once again. And I can't wait to finish reading Unexpected Circumstances! Keep up the great writing!
More! More! More! Hehehe : ) I love this story too!!
sesskag (Chapter 15) - Sat 13 Sep 2008
hey wats up i luv the story continue to write more!
YAY! They Finally Did It! They Had That Coming For a While! (Laugh) Please Update Soon! This Story Is So0o0 Good! :]
dearestsesshy (Chapter 15) - Fri 29 Aug 2008
please don't cry, you are so loved. your writing is beautiful luv the new chap. can't wait for the next one. so turn your frowns upside down lol
Kagome357 (Chapter 1) - Fri 29 Aug 2008
Bookmarking this because my mind is filled with the editing on the Hisa chapter so I can't focus but I remember reading the first two chapters on SessKag and then couldn't remember where I had read it. I'm glad it's here and I'll read the rest this weekend.
Just reread the whole chapter, nice and slow. Very tasty! Can't help but think though, they're gonna get busted. Sess may not go to jail, but how embarrassing! I just like to pick on him too much.
**^_^** I've seen this story somewheres before.... mm, A-Single-Spark? **shrug** update soon!!
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