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Inudemoness (Chapter 5) - Tue 22 Aug 2017

I don't understand why Kagome felt so hurt, like she should have expected that kind of reaction from the demons and Sesshomaru considereing their prior reactions! I will be waiting for your next update :)


chevonne knowles (Chapter 5) - Tue 22 Aug 2017

I read your story and I think that some of the ideas are interesting

I think Kagome going in arrows blazing to save damsels in distress is cool. I think that Inuyasha and her being on good terms is wonderful. I really wanted them to terrify those good-for-nothing individuals for what they were happily willing to let happen. I like Kagome being the intermediary between two racist human and Yokai. 

The first thing  that's completely wrong is sesshomarus character. Sesshomaru has way too much honor to disrespect an  comrade-in-arms. I could see him asking her what right does she have to speak in court. That would make sense. But his outright disrespect and humiliation is not something he would do Post defeat of Naraku. Another thing that I highly disagree with is Sesshomaru allowing anyone to rape someone. there's just no excuse for it. His advisors wouldn't dare try to push him around and demand it be done either. Realistically there's no way kagome sesshomaru could be together after something like that because Kagome is modern sensibilities would be completely disgusted at his allowance of said Behavior. Sesshomaru and Inuyasha are certainly on better terms then what you portray in the story.  now I could understand if it was before everything but after they fought together and learn how to rely on each other it's just out of place.


InuKami-Sama (Chapter 5) - Mon 21 Aug 2017

I really loving the story so far because it different it's not the same old same old ....keep it up ...update fast and maybe a bit longer chapters? :)


Crimson Rose (Chapter 5) - Mon 21 Aug 2017

I'm confused with this story. I'm not sure I like it because of the parts that don't make sense with the flow of way you're going with this story. But then here I am reading each chapter you post. Using the proper words would help as well. I really like the idea of this story.


Natalia (Chapter 5) - Mon 21 Aug 2017

Hm i am still confused with the time line, so Sana took one week to come here but kagome let her go at night alone cause she will find her way easy and soon would be home. How soon? Not sure kagome will leave her alone after that attempt. Not very convincing sorry!

How you depict it, it sounds like those old geezers are in charge and can do whatever they want, sesshoumaru is even constrained to watch them have their fun, is he not a strong leader and only being manipulated by the farts? Cause it seems this way. There should be a reason he went back in his character growth since at the end of the manga he was a little different. Here it's like he went back and forgot all his lessons and experience he had and became a bully again so no I see no character growth here at all! If we go by old society type his would be democracy and not monarchy or tyranny like it was typical in those times. I feel like everyone there can do whatever they want and sesshoumaru won't bat an eyelash. He is not in charge.

The society still confused me and I am not sure it's believable, they hate humans so much at the point to be sick while seeing one then they rape them? It's like raping an animal, since they consider them so,  so sorry I am not convinced. It seems shallow, like they exist in another dimension or something. Enclosed or behind a veil. If so they would not permit human settlements next to them at all. I am sorry for being such a nag but I really like the idea and try to see the plot from different angles!

Please explain the situation with Sana, the timeline and why she went there cause her grandmother knew where she was going. And why not send a male? Or a grown up female? If knowing it's dangerous?

I was so glad there were two more chapters to read! Thx for updating! It only teased my curiosity more! Hopefully you will update soon thx!

Cheers!


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 4) - Mon 21 Aug 2017

Sorry about the word English part...that was a mistake. lol


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 4) - Mon 21 Aug 2017

This chapter was nicely done. It answered some questions.

I believe that there is some kind of youkai ritual or law that would have allowed for Sana to be treated the way she was treated and Sessho standing there to condone such behaviour even though he did not actively participate. Regardless of his disdain and dislike of humans, some how I cannot believe that he liked what was happening to the girl regardless of her humanity. 

Kagome will get her answers one way or another, I am sure. Hopefully Sana does not become pregnant...I think they had herbal remedies back then to prevent such things from happening if a woman was raped. It is sad how her virginity was ripped away from her by a bunch of old ass barbarians.

Sessho was very clever standing outside the door of his study waiting to see who will come out. He did sense that there was someone in there.

Keep it going...you are doing quite well and your English is so good.

 


Mona (Chapter 4) - Mon 21 Aug 2017

I still don't like Sesshoumaru and still hope this will not be a romantic pairing for him and Kagome.  


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 3) - Sun 20 Aug 2017

I am somewhat confused by this storyline.  I get where are trying to take this story but this last paragraph of chapter three made no sense to me. Why would Sesshomaru have performed a sexual assault on a human girl? Although Kagome did not actually see Sesshomaru and assumed it was his room, it could of been some other royal person. I'll leave that part up for a revelation.

The chapters are very well written and will continuing reading to see what is revealed in future chapters. Looking forward for more updates on this intriguing story.


Pixiekun (Chapter 1) - Sun 20 Aug 2017

Wow! I like it. The way you slowly developed their romance is good. I liked guys that have redeeming quality. Keep it up!


SammyJams (Chapter 2) - Sun 20 Aug 2017

Wow! Just wow! What a FANTASTIC start to this story! I am so pumped for more! I'm happy you didn't make Kagome more than what she usually is, and I'm happy Sess starts off being the way he was in the beginning of the manga. Can't wait fore more! 


Natalia (Chapter 3) - Sun 20 Aug 2017

Not sure what to think of this fic honestly.  The last scene made me sick like the youkais running to the bushes. Like a hammer to my head. Also the passing of the fic is too rushed and a little confusing. I get it that there has to be more to sesshoumaru and his reasons but I feel like you are contradicting yourself. Youkais hate humans, sesshoumaru especially,  so why would they bed and rape them? I get the torture and killing but in my opinion sesshoumaru would not bed a human like this. If you point that they look at humans like animals why rape then and have sexual intercourse ? Isn't it stated that they hate the relationship between a human and youkais? See contradictory!  Besides if thinking about humans like animals doesn't include sex, in old times humans killed and tortured animals for sports so the allusions is a bit disturbing.  Also kagome,s decision to stay is too rushed in my opinion.  It's not that I don't like the fic, on the contrary I feel it will become one of my favourite, but I am a fan of logic and tend to nitpick everything,  sorry about that, please tell me if you don't want my opinion and ignore my words if you wish, this is only constructive feedback and I mean no offence.  I like the idea of kagome in such an environment but seriously it's like this village is in another world. And such hate and how they get sick is too overboard. And sesshoumaru allows them free reign?  Not very believable,  he seems weak like not in charge. Like everyone in his castle does whatever they want. The society isn't too believable.  That's what disturbs me.

Anyway I really enjoyed the fic and I always review what I read, I consider that every writer has to receive praise for his work.  I like the idea very much. Please keep writing and update soon.


Mona (Chapter 3) - Sun 20 Aug 2017

p.s. You might want to add dark to this fic since you included sexual assault.


Mona (Chapter 3) - Sun 20 Aug 2017

I officially hate Sesshoumaru and hope this is story that only involes Sessh/Kag as diplomatic colleagues.  And I hope Kagome, although not accustomed to yokai ways, will be strong and defeat Sesshoumar, at least that aspect will be different than any other fic I have read.


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