I re-read the first chapter and sorry to say that it still isn't very clear what is happening and why. It's like two plots smushed together. The gist I got out of it was that your story needed them all to disappear so that Kagome can feel worthless and that she has to make up for her existence somehow? And now that she's made this promise it will slowly give her life purpose again, I think? Perhaps, it would be worthwhile to go back and tweak the first chapter so that it doesn't give the wrong first impression of the story? I'll be on the look out for your next update. Curious how you will develop the story.
Anonymous (Chapter 1) - Sun 26 Feb 2017
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(Chapter 1) - Wed 15 Feb 2017
AUTHOR'S NOTE~~~~
More questions will be answered and no they were not fighting by the well, I guess I didn't explain it enough but it was a flashback type thing Kagome was having, and yes the point was to make them think things were fine so the delayed reaction of the wish was on purpose. Thank you so much everyone for your reviews and everyone taking the time to read!! More to come shortly and always feel free to message me if you have questions or just need to talk! :)
~~Much Love, Jess
It's a nice start. Though I would recommend breaking your chapter into paragraphs. It's a bit difficult to read as one big text block.
Ree-san (Chapter 1) - Tue 14 Feb 2017
I'm confused on a couple of things. I never got the impression that they were fighting near the well, but suddenly they're all at the well? Did they journey back to it after the battle and then everyone died? If the wish caused their deaths, why the delayed reaction. It seems like they celebrated and talked after Naraku and the jewel disappeared. Also, many people were touched by what happened with the jewel. Did Koga die along with lots of other demons and people? Sorry for the questions, but confused.
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