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Mutnodjmet (Chapter 5) - Sat 28 Jan 2017

This was a very interesting chapter. You did nicely for just writing the chapter in such short amount time and then post it too.

Both Kagome and Sessho are acting rather wierdly and just so OOC. If they are mates, would they not feel each others feelings like when Kagome felt Sessho's over whelming sadness and vice versa, they should be feeling each other's feelings when they are close to each other and the babies would be acting excited when they are near their father. The way Kagome broke it off with Sesshomaru was a bit unneccessarily cruel doing it through a text telling him there was no passion between them. They both should have been going through some form of mating pangs because they are not around each other enough, especially if she is changing.

The other thing is, unless I missed it, why was Sessho not wearing his markings and where was his beast. Sessho just gives up too easily and basically let certain people push him around like Kagome making rules and demands of him and him wimping out.

Well anyway, I'm sure you will have all the answers in your next chapter, I hope...this Sesshomaru is frustrating me out. lol

I love the story and keep doing the wonderful writing that you are doing. I am looking forward to the next chapter.

Toni (Chapter 5) - Fri 27 Jan 2017

really enjoyed this chapter   can't wait for the next one

Arielle (Chapter 1) - Fri 27 Jan 2017

It's a good story it needs a bit of formatting. For instance when the characters speak you should start a new sentence.


"I am going to name one of the twins Abigail." Kagome said

Sesshomaru tensed and replied, "I don't know if I like that name since it was a character in your last erotic novel." 


"It was the book that helped you get into your current state." He answered. I think you get the idea.


Also try to get into the mind of the character because some of their responses are too obvious. Sessh is a fighter and a dog characteristic is stubbornness. He's a bit flat.

Natalia (Chapter 5) - Fri 27 Jan 2017

I like it and thx for updating but please! Please use you're instead of 'your' for every form you are yours or other. Please! I like it and sorry to be a bother but it makes me cringe and ruins the flow of reading! Please don't be mad at me. I understand it may be easier but it's bugging me! Thx in advance! Take care!

LoveAndFaith (Chapter 3) - Sat 14 Jan 2017

This story is very interesting, keep it coming. Happy New Year!

snow (Chapter 3) - Sat 14 Jan 2017

interesting story! i will add it to my favorites and keep following the progress.

Alashia (Chapter 1) - Fri 13 Jan 2017

Can't wait to see what happens when they meet. Great story so far! Hope you will update soon.

Mutnodjmet (Chapter 3) - Fri 13 Jan 2017

Very nice chapter, well written and humerous too. 

Some men are so dense and it seems Touga and Sessho fall in that catagory somewhat. They should have started at the bottom first; it probably could have saved them some time searrching. I usually start at the bottom first myself because it always seems to work for me most of the time....that's how my luck  I was surprised that InuKimi did not sense that Kagome's babies were demonic when she touched her stomach or maybe felt a familiar aura coming from her. Well, at least they finally found the right person. Now that she is four and half months, hopefully Sessho gets to find and aquaints himself with her before the babies are born at least.

I hope you are feeling much better than before and maybe get some much needed sleep as time goes by. I just got home from having an Endoscopy procedure a half an hour ago and the first thing I did was get on my computer to check for your story and was excited when it was posted...yaaah!

Looking forward to the next chapter. Excellent job!

Izzy (Chapter 2) - Mon 09 Jan 2017

Very interesting!

Mutnodjmet (Chapter 2) - Mon 09 Jan 2017

This story is coming together nicely. Sessho seems to be finally getting it together. I loved the part with the conversation he has with his parents, especially when his mother refers to his penis as mini Sesshomaru. It cracked me up.

I have another comment but I will PM that to you later. Looking forward to more chapters. Great job!

Victoria (Chapter 2) - Mon 09 Jan 2017

When I read the summary, I was already hooked. Can't wait for the next chapter and how far this story will go and the development of the characters. Keep up the good work.

Violla (Chapter 2) - Mon 09 Jan 2017

Bellissima storia 

zodiak023 (Chapter 2) - Mon 09 Jan 2017

awe I like this story very original plot I like the ending to chapter two really good and very creative with the whole mating d pregnancy thing. I love it hurry up with the next chappies don't leave me hanging like this.

Diane Peter (Chapter 1) - Mon 09 Jan 2017

Kinda hard to read, has formatting errors or something. The sentences go off the edge of the page & some of the paragraphs have line spaces in the middle of the sentences. I just copy/pasted it into a txt doc so I'll see if I can actually read it now.

Susi8 (Chapter 1) - Sun 08 Jan 2017

I like your story so far, the plot sounds interesting. :D

Samara (Chapter 1) - Sun 08 Jan 2017

Okay. I am  definitely interested in this story.  But... I had to copy and paste it into a word processor from the "print view" just to read it.  The lines cut off on the normal view and the print view font was teeny.  I read on my cell.  I don't often run into this problem, so I am thinking it had something to do with the editing on your end.


Good luck.  I hope to see the next chapter soon!

Toni (Chapter 1) - Sun 08 Jan 2017

looking forward to more chapters 

Mutnodjmet (Chapter 1) - Sun 08 Jan 2017

I like the concept of the story. Sessho is so OOC but I kind of like him. He seems slightly dense.

The only thing I see wrong is the formatting. Maybe it's your new computer. My computer is faulty too. The space bar is fucked up. I have to keep going back and separating the words that did not move when I hit the space bar, it makes my words look like one long word. It is a pain in my ass. lol

Question: If Sessho decides to keep going to the sperm bank for quick cash and since Kagome is the first woman to get impregnated, does this mean that any other woman that comes along and picks his sperm it won't take because he already has pups on the way? And also does the crescent moon on Kagome's belly mean that she and Sessho are automatically mated? Just wondering!

I look forward to more chapters of this story. Will you complete this one and not leave it incomplete like your other stories? My apologies if this sounds rude, it is not meant to be because I know you have a RL. Nice job!


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