Oooo....  A  harem fic?!  Can't wait

HI, I LOVE THIS FANFIC, GREAT PLOT SO FAR, CAN'T WAIT TO READ MORE...,HOPE YOU UPDATE MORE OFTEN IN THE FUTURE,,,,I HOPE KAGOME GETS A LOT OF MATING OFFERS TO MAKE SESSHOUMARU JEALOUS....I ALSO HOPE KIKYO AND WHOEVER IT IS THAT IS AFTER KAGOME GET DISCOVERED SOON AND KILLED BY KAGS OR SESSHOUMARU....BUT I PREFER KAGS KILL THEM TO REALLY SHOW OFF HER POWERS.AND IF INUYASHA TRIES TO MESS WITH KAGS I HOPE SHE KICKS HIS ASS...,BIGTIME...LOL...I HOPE INUYASHA CATCHES KIKYO IN THE ACT WITH SOMEONE ELSE,REALLY SOON SO HE CAN FINALLY SEE HER FOR WHO SHE REALLY IS. ALSO WHY DID KIKYO MENTION TOKYO.....WHAT WAS THAT ABOUT....AND WHO SENT THE LETTER TO KIKYO ABOUT GETTING RID OF KAGOME........................................................PLEASE UPDATE SOON,,,,,,,,,,,,,TDAN

I think Kagome is being tested for more than she think ^^

Happy Birthday....

Wow that was a fun chapter....  I enjoyed it very much...  Sango well I don't think she's found the one presay but one she could connect with.  Now Kagome's the one I gotta see if she has what it takes to at least defeat the Eiji or who ever she'll fight.  Wonder what Sesshomaru will think if he is there to watch.

update soon.

Every time i see a new new chapter i feel like i am getting a present. This one was lovely and i can't wait for the next one????

Great chapter. 

Good chapter.

HI LOVE THE FANFIC, GREAT BEGINNING ....BUT I WISH YOU WOULD UPDATE MORE OFTEN...THIS STORY SEEMS LIKE ITS GOING TO TAKE FOREVER TO FINISH....SO MUCH HAS TO HAPPEN BEFORE THE END....SEEMS LIKE THERE ARE STILL MANY SECRETS SURROUNDING KAGOME....HOPE THAT AT LEAST THOSE COME TO LIGHT REAL SOON...............ANYWAY.....I HOPE THAT YOU UPDATE QUICKLY....I REALLY HOPE KAGS DOES AWAY WITH KIKYO REALLY SOON I'M GETTING SICK OF HER CRAP .....SHE'S SUCH A NASTY HO! HOPE INUYASHA FINDS OUT REAL SOON SHE'S RUTTING MEN LEFT AND RIGHT....(HOPE SHE GETS CAUGHT IN THE ACT  BY INUYASHA,TOGA,SESS,MIROKU AND KAGOME)....HOPE KAGS AND SESS MOM GET ALONG GREAT....WHERE ARE SHIPPO, RIN, AND KILALA .....AND CORRECT ME IF I'M WRONG BUT HAS SANGO BECOME INUYASHA'S CONCUBINE....I'M GETTING THE IMPRESSION THAT SOMETHING LIKE THAT IS GOING ON... IF THATS THE CASE THEN...DAMN. I'M EXPECTING KAGOME TO CALL HER OUT ON HER WHORING WAYS... I HOPE KAGS REALLY TELLS HER OFF, LETTING HER HAVE IT BIGTIME AND SHAMING SANGO BIG TIME IN FRONT OF ALL OF INUYASHA'S FAMILY AND NATSU AND HIS FATHER.....IT WOULD SERVE SANGO RIGHT FOR BEING A NASTY HO!!!!  I DON'T THINK KAGS WOULD BACK DOWN FROM HAVING IT OUT WITH HER EVEN IF SHE DID CONSIDER HER A FRIEND AT ONE TIME....I DON'T THINK KAGS WILL HAVE ANYTHING TO DO WITH HER AFTER WHAT SHE DID TO MIROKU,ESPECIALLY IF SHE HAS BECOME INUYASHA'S CONCUBINE....IF I WAS KAGS I WOULDN'T HAVE ANYTHING TO DO WITH INUYASHA EITHER AFTER HOW HE AND KIKYO BEHAVED AND TREATED HER BEFORE SHE LEFT.....I WOULD IGNORE THEM LIKE THEY WERE INSIGNIFICANT INSECTS...UNLESS THEY PISS HER OFF...THEN I'LL SIT BACK AND WATCH THE SHIT HIT THE FAN,SO TO SPEAK...LOL..................................................................PLEASE UPDATE SOOOOOOON!!!!!!!...............................TDAN

Hey there . I'm new to your story but I wanted to leave a comment . I waited until I had gotten through all the chapters. Overall I think your character  development and pace is fine. I don't write fanfics anymore however I can relate with trying to find your groove. with each story it will come at different times. Also like your no cannon character  additions.  You could probably if you wanted lean into some side arcs to chapters to develop the backstories even more depending on what you goal is for this body of work. Since you are asking for critiques  , I do think there are some spots of redundancy or over explaination might be a better way to put it that you could condense .  For example you might not explain a thought in 3rd person then have the character think it verbatim and then say  aloud.  hope that makes sense . If you have some time while we are all trying to do this sheltering in place go back over the chapters and possibly what I'm saying will be clearer. :) looking forward to your next installment.

I think the pace is great! Keep up the great work! Maybe update several chapters at once, lol, so we have something great to read during lock down. 

It's dragging...

I believe the story is going at a great pace, Not to fast not to slow.  It feels like reading a novel, keep up the good work.

It is a good story.  I think it could pick up a little bit... but it isn't bad if you keep the same pace either.  You really aren't repeating yourself, and that's my biggest pet peeve personally with some stories.

 Can't wait to see where you take it

Nice chapter.

Great chapter, Happy Birthday To Me!

HI, I LIKE YOUR FANFIC....HOPE YOU UPDATE MORE OFTEN....LOOKIN FORWARD TO SEEING KAGOME WHIP KIKYOS BUTT INTO THE DEEPEST PIT OF HELL ALONG WITH WHOEVER ELSE IS TRYING TO KILL KAGOME TO JOIN NARAKU....I HOPE SESS FALLS IN LOVE WITH KAGS AND DECIDES TO GIVE UP BEING A BACHELOR. WHEN ARE WE GOING TO FIND OUT WHAT THE CONNECTION BETWEEN KAGS AND NATSU. WHO WAS NATSU FATHER TALKING ABOUT WHEN HE SAID KAGOME LOOKS LIKE HER....WHO IS HER .....IS HE TALKING ABOUT NATSU'S SISTER THAT DISSAPPEARED ,THE PRINCESS MIDORIKO TOLD KAGOME TO FIND ..............................................................................................................TDAN

All seven chapters are good,  Happy New Year!

HI, LOVE THE STORY....PLEASE UPDATE OFTEN....LOOKING FORWARD TO READING MORE....HOW MANY CHAPTERS DO YOU THINK THE FANFIC WILL HAVE....WILL TOUGA GET BACK TOGETHER WITH HIS EX-MATE , SESSHOUMARU'S MOTHER....CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT HIS MOM THINKS OF KAGOME.... I HOPE THEY GET ALONG.... CAN'T WAIT TO SEE WHAT THE OTHER LORDS , LADIES AND OTHER POTENTIAL MATES TAKE HAVING A POWERFUL MIKO IN THE CASTLE....HOPE KAGS IS SUPER POWERFUL.... LOVE A STRONG,POWERFUL,INDEPENDANT,CONFIDENT,INTELLIGENT, KAGOME....THIS IS THE BEST TYPE OF KAGOME ....CAN'T STAND A WEEK,WINNY,DEPENDANT , KAGOME WHO ALLOWS SOME ONE TO USE HER , OR LET'S OTHERS RUN OVER HER...ALSO BY NOW KAGOME WOULD KNOW HOW TO DO..... OFUDA'S , SUTRA'S , KOTODAMA NECKLACES LIKE THE ONE INUYASHA WEARS , HOW TO THROW POWERBALLS OF REIKI WITH HER HANDS , HOW TO MAKE TREES/PLANTS GROW LIKE KIKYO DID , HOW TO HEAL USING HER POWER , MAKE DIFFERENT TYPES BARRIERS LIKE KIKYO DID , SHE EVEN HAD AN INVISIBLE BARRIER SO PEOPLE COULDN'T FIND HER , CAST SPELLS AND DO ENCHANTMENTS INSTANTLY , AND SHE SHOULD USE MULTIPLE WEAPONS LIKE MIDORIKO , AND DON'T FORGET SHE IS SUPPOSE TO BE IMMORTAL , TIMELESS , TIME DOES NOT TOUCH HER AT LEAST THAT'S WHAT KAGUYA SAID... THATS WHY SHE WANTED TO EAT KAGOME TO STEAL HER POWER OF IMMORTALITY , .................ANYWAY I HOPE YOU UPDATE REAL SOON.................................................................................TDAN

Interesting  how is the increase  is sexual desire going to effect Kagome and if Touga is with her all the time him and how will Sesshomaru  react to that cause I will be honest I want Sesshy Lags lemons XD