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KShadeslady (Chapter 5) - Mon 19 Dec 2016

It's all about him! Looks like a great plot development. Just please learn how to use some periods. It will make them much more readable and enjoyable. I'm going to follow this story. I really want to see where it goes. Are you using a beta?


KShadeslady (Chapter 3) - Mon 19 Dec 2016

Nice idea and I like the storyline. You REALLY NEED to learn how to use commas and periods. You have so many run on sentences that I have to reread some things a few times and mentally add punctuation so I could understand what you were saying. Slow down a bit and don't try to cram the whole story into one chapter. If you are planning on writing a lemon, build up to it. Add some tention. It like you are in a rush to just write the lemon.  The first two chapters seem very rushed. I like the story and I want to see where it goes. 


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 5) - Mon 19 Dec 2016

Wonderful chapter. Can Inuyasha be any more ignorant and full of himself than he already is.  He could not even fathom what Kagome told him about her true feelings concerning Sessho.  In this case Inuyasha and Kikyo deserve each other because they are so much alike. What does he think Kikyo is doing when she temporarily breaks it off with him...el stupido. lol

Sessho will be getting the better woman.  She played Inuyasha and he thinks that Kouga will ruin something that has already begun  between herself and Sessho further more Kouga has already shown his true colors earlier and Sessho had seen the outcome of that situation.

I loved how Kagome handled Inuyasha. She did and said the right things even though it embarassed her. She came out on top.


MythMagykFae (Chapter 5) - Mon 19 Dec 2016

Ummmm, I think you are getting Sesshomaru confused with yourself InuBaka...

Wonderful chapter, I look forward to more!


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 4) - Sun 18 Dec 2016

Getting to more and more of my liking. They seem to be getting closer and closer to putting all the puzzle pieces together...yaaah! Another good chapter and has now officially has become my favorite story. Glad Shippo made into the story. Only ones missing is Miroku, Sango, Kohaku and Kirara. Well Kirara should still be around and the the other three can be reincarnations. So where would Jaken and Ah-Un be? Any ancestors of Rin?  All of them around and Sessho can have his pack again. That would be nice. I think he would have the family I get the impression that he wants.

Before the story ends It would be nice to see Sessho and Kagome mated with an heir. That would be the icing on the cake with a cherry on top.

Good chapter...keep it coming.

 


MythMagykFae (Chapter 4) - Sun 18 Dec 2016

More and more interesting!


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 3) - Fri 16 Dec 2016

Ah, lovely chapter but too short. I'll take what I can get, it's either that or nothing at all and I will cry if I can't get anything at all. lol :)

Kagome wants Sessho desparately it seems. You go girl!

Great writing...I think I saw one or two spelling errors but no biggy. Keep it coming and as always I'll be looking forward to future updates and I will always bug you for longer chapters....lol (just kidding). :)


MythMagykFae (Chapter 3) - Fri 16 Dec 2016

No, no she wouldn't lol. Nice update! (:


princess of the western lands (Chapter 2) - Fri 16 Dec 2016

Ooh can't wait for the next chapter! Will kagome remember everything when she's mated? Will sesshomaru court kagome or mate her that night? Where's shippou in this story? Will anyone remember or will things just work themselves out some how?

 

Update soon onegai

 

Ja ne


Toni (Chapter 2) - Thu 15 Dec 2016

I love it  can't wait for the next chapter 


MythMagykFae (Chapter 2) - Thu 15 Dec 2016

interesting story !


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 2) - Wed 14 Dec 2016

Well that was a great entrance for Sessho. I loved it. I take it Kagome has no memory of her Fuedal Era time?

Great chapter. I can hardly wait for the next chapter. I meant to say that your title for this story seems to have a double meaning. lol


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 1) - Wed 14 Dec 2016

I am sorry. I didn't read the  summary properly. You did mention that it was set in Kagome's time and I had mentioned in my review that it sounded like it could be in the modern time with demons and humans living harmoniously together. My error.


Mutnodjmet (Chapter 1) - Wed 14 Dec 2016

This sounds like it could be a very interesting and enjoyable read. It is nicely written and I am looking forward to reading more . It seems like it has a different and fascinating concept. This first chapter seemed somewhat a little rushed but I liked it anyway. Do you expect it to be a short chapter story or a little longer one?  I am not a nit picker but I hope you stick with the story and not write one or two chapters and forget about it. You have a good start here with chapter one. A little back story on some of the main characters and it sounds like the modern age with demons and human live harmoniously together. I am looking forward to the next and future chapters. Great job!


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