I had so much fun reading your story and really want to see where you're taking it. A suggestion is for Kei's speech to only be italicized English and not several 'mew's unless you use it as a verb. That's it. That's the best critique I could think of: a grammar thing that is not even incorrect as you already use it (aka: You are doing great!). Thank you for sharing your story!
Well I am a bit confused as to what Kagome looks like now. I understand that she has very long, pretty black hair and solid black eyes, (perhaps slightly creepy, since I have seen those same eyes on horror creatures in the movies before, sorry) but as for the skin....all I can envision is swirls of ever changing color dancing all over the surface/slightly underneath her skin.....sort of like a disco ball but better. Of course she has also become fuller in her figure as well. I am going to guess that the color changing patterns on her skin is the result of the different kinds of youkai powers she has absorbed over time? That is why Sesshomaru smelled so many different youkai at once?
I also do not know what kind of demon Kagome is now. Does she have the ability to morph into the different demons that she absorbed? Is she an Inu? does she have a tail and will she gain a moko-moko? Is moko-moko a trait only from Lord Sesshomaru's family line? If not, could you please send me a moko-moko by partial post? I will even take C.O.D. mail orders please.Ha ha. I happen to be in love with the moko-moko and won't hear anything bad said about it.......ha ha.
OK I've got that out of my system now......maybe....... Thanks for the update. I can't wait for the "confrontation" dum dum dum!!!!!! Yea!!! I hope that Lord Sessy likes the "new Kagome" look. Or does Kagome still have some tweaking with herself beforehand? More changes?
She is now a daiyoukai. . But she is not in perfect shape.. poor kagome T_T
She getting closer
OMG! It will be interseting to see Sesshomaru's reaction to Kagome. Please update soon. I'm dying to see what happens next :)
I love Kagome's new weapon! But i hope she will be alright though. :)
Ha Ha! IS Kagome gonna punch Totosai in the head like Inuyasha did for taking a fang? HAHA
Aw poor Inuyasha. I hope Kagome meets her friends soon. I hope they realize its her.
Very interesting! I like it:)
Mia (Chapter 4) - Sun 17 Apr 2016
Awesome so far!
Is she now a Dai lady of the East or some such?
Post more soon!!
Mona (Chapter 4) - Sun 17 Apr 2016
Excellent!!! I hope to read more soon.
Interesting story. I really like the way your developing Kagome.
Unusual chapter but interesting. Where and how did the Dai appear from? What kind of beast was he? Where was Kei? Since Kagome killed the creature of such strength and power and absorbed his youki she should be going through another change where she can take on a humanoid form right? Could it have been a cardinal lord maybe or just a plain Dai? I'll stop the interrogations here for now. I hope she is a dynamite looking demoness. LOL
It was great. And now I see why she didn't try to find anyone she thought more time had pass. Loved the way the sdmith knew it was her. Looking forward to the reunion..
O! I dig it! Very entertaining! Can't wait for the next installment
Great as always well done.
Yes! Kagome is finally getting a youkai weapon made from her own tooth! So cool! Take that Inuyasha and Sesshomaru!! Kagome's getting cool stuff too!!!
I like that fact that Kaedae noticed Kagome....well not that she knew that it was Kagome in particular but at least she noticed something. Perhaps when Kagome gets strong enough to change again others will notice as well. It would be interesting to see what would happen if Sesshomaru runs into Kai and Kagome.
Thanks for the new chapter!
Another great chapter. Hmm so kaede can sense that something isn't right and that it involves kagome, will she tell the others? When kagome evolves again will she keep her previous forms powers or will they change again with a new form? Thanks for the update.
Update soon onegai
Ja ne
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