Despite being an interesting story, at least from what I have read so far, this thread is very risky, by that I mean, one easily runs the risk of adding too much doing too exaggerated and uninteresting, is a must to look good to write a story, but if you go so far as not have to worry.
The spelling is fine for now, otherwise I would be useless translator.
As for Naraku note that this is a character who acts more psychologically than physically, the usually not start confronaciones prefers manipulate and let others do it for him, every appearance he does, whether he or his dummy, teasing initially used to decentralize and irritate his enemies, after all, an enraged enemy is not thinking clearly, and easily swayed by anger.
I hope I have helped you, if I think of anything more'll tell you, good luck with your muse.
Eva (Chapter 4) - Wed 06 Jan 2016
You did great winging it. This was a solid chapter. Thanks for sharing your talent with us.
Great story, keep it coming. Happy New Year!
Eva (Chapter 3) - Sat 02 Jan 2016
I didn't expect Castiel. That was fun. I guess I would like to know what kind of use she would have been. Did they plan to use her to host Michael?
Could you describe the hellhounds? I keep thinking of Skyrims version of them.........complete with collar....ha ha!!! Finally something that unnerved the Great Sesshomaru!!! How cool is that? Thanks for the update, I can't wait for more! Oh, by the way, Merry Belated Christmas and Happy New Year!!!!!
Mona (Chapter 3) - Thu 31 Dec 2015
Awesome!!!
Haven (Chapter 2) - Thu 24 Dec 2015
Hehehe......Sesshomaru and Hell hounds? I can't wait for that scene to play out more.
Mona (Chapter 2) - Wed 23 Dec 2015
Great!!!! I am looking forward to the next update.
Anonymous (Chapter 2) - Wed 23 Dec 2015
I like it keep it up
Who are Hannah, Ru and Haru? Some sort of special animal companion? Great beginning by the way, just try to flesh out your story a bit more and you'll have my two thumbs up for this one! Can't wait to read the next chapter to find out why the well stopped working and if any of her friends are still aliveand trying to fi the shards, etc.......
Loveyaa (Chapter 1) - Sat 19 Dec 2015
Interesting thought. I wonder how you will blend the two worlds together and why the well kept Kagome out for so long. I can't wait to see what happens next :)
Haven (Chapter 1) - Sat 19 Dec 2015
Is what she has Help hounds? That would be so cool.
Rhonda (Chapter 1) - Sat 19 Dec 2015
AWESOME SAUCE!!!!!!
Looking forward to how blown away her friends will be. Please have her stand up to Inuyasha's belittling and any feelings of inadequacy IF that golem Kikyo is around...
Looking so forward to where you are gonna take us on this new and much approved quest!
Sabrina (Chapter 1) - Sat 19 Dec 2015
I'm Loving this so far! Hope you can update and finish this story soon! Keep up the awesome work my dear!
Love it sofas and can't wait for the necr chapter. :D
Mona (Chapter 1) - Fri 18 Dec 2015
Interesting first chapter I am curious as to what will happen next and the response she will receive from her feudal companions.
Anonymous (Chapter 1) - Fri 18 Dec 2015
I like it I want to see their reactions to the new and improved Kagome
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