Good job... I was able to read the point of the chapters.   keep up the practice.

LOL, thier squabbling is pretty humorous. I look froward to the next chapter. (:

I had a hard time understanding significant parts of the chapters.  I don't think you should give up, I just think you need a Beta to work with you before you post.  It's hard to really get an idea of people's responses to the plot and the character development with the issues that the story has currently.  You should think about posting for a Beta through the forum.  Good luck!

Keep posting!

sho! even w ur concerns w grammar and tense i applaude ur willingness to try ;) thank u for that story it wasn"t finished and I hoped to hear more of it but i wouldn't pressure u. Still, all the best and goodluck should u wish to pursue this ffic i am here cheering u on! always love a good story regardless :D

Hhmmmmm

Good for you don't give up your story is very good and its your own. Grammer probelm and all.

I like your story even with the grammar mistakes. Keep writing a it will get better as you learn.

I recommend finding a beta to help with your tense and grammar corrections, also a spell check. Sometimes all a story needs is a helping hand.

Funny story idea. :) 

Awsome.

That was Awsome.

Chapter 4 : Deal

"So we must rearrange our deal again, Miko." He walked into his luxurious room followed by a miko swearing to herself in her misery.

"It's Kagome, Demon!" She warned him. She felt that everytime he called her by her title, it was like an insult instead of an honor.

He sighed, rubbed the bridge of his nose and took a chair to sit in front of the expensive wooden table in the middle of his room. Kagome huffed still with her anger stood across far away from him. She refused to sit down and talk nicely.

"So, This Sesshoumaru thinks that-"

"i don't care about what you think, Mr. Fluffy! I will not help you anymore. Honestly, I have been thinking maybe I will gladly accept my fate to be stuck in this world until I die before I take a chance to stuck with you-FOREVER!" Screamed her last word to him. Her harsh breath indicate that she really meant what she had said.

"It will hurt your honor, Mi-Kagome." He was able to correct the last part of his speech to prevent the damage of his old habit to called the raven hair girl with her title. "You promised me that-"

"Promise my ass. I told you that I accept it not promise it. By the way, you broke your promise too. You said she would refuse me and I could go back to whatever my life was before." She interupted him again.

"Miko, control your language. I will not tolerate your foul words again. Know you place before-"

"Threatened me again but wanted me to be your mate. Oh the irony-" Her sarcasm made his ears burn in anger. One more interruption and he would not hesitate to cut off her head.

"I don't want you to become my mate. It's just a fake relationship." His response made here roll her eyes in annoyance. He could hear her rumbling voice from her throat that informed him that his statement did not match up with her opinion.

"Fake relationship that was blessed by your mother! Oh maybe after this she'll be begging me to bear your child." Tossing her hand to express her hysterical inner self. Kagome made a dash to shorten their space. "I'm telling you that-"

"Pups."

"Huh?"

"Inu-youkai children are called Pups not children." He corrected her choosen word. That was absurd, he had tried to change the subject and made her mouth hang open in awe.

"Don't bother to correct my speech!" She slammed her fist to his table, hissing in pain when she felt the impact of the hard wood under her hand. Just another foolish human. "I really-really-really want to run my little fingers around your neck and choked you to death." That was her silly threat, but his head rang a bell made his beast purring in a bliss.

'She is so vulgar. I like her chosen words. I want to feel that. Take her, buddy.'

'I'm assure you that This Sesshoumaru is not a masochist. And we don't want her.' He refused to accept his beast's opinion. He wouldn't fall for this girl. Let alone a HUMAN!

'You and your ignorant self. We want her but you always denied it!' He shook his head in decline. That was impossible. But after his failed experience to predict the 'impossible' thing. Maybe he must reconsidered it again.

"Don't ignore me!" He blinked few times after he was caught that not pay attention to her. She whined. "I don't want to participate in this battle. I'm a human and they are elite demonesses! They can easly take me down and I will-" She frowned and paused her speech. "Die by their hands. Nope! You're not worth fighting for." She voiced her argument fearless of her indirect rejection and careless of the honor found around the youkai world in being Sesshoumaru's Queen.

"That can be easly handled by my Tensaiga." He gave her reasonable answer. Of course it was easy for him to bring her back to living world with his treasure sword. "You have my word." He added it to make sure that she believed, he would not disclaim his promise.

She grunted before nodded and flopped on his bed to rest her exhausted body. Rolled her body to take one of his pillows. She buring her head under the comfort of the fluffy thing and murmuring a last paragraph before landed to her dream.

"Even if I become the winner of this competition, I refuse to become your mate. Please find the way out and handle it before I burn your handsome face, Demon." An inhuman smirk plastered his face after he caught her last words. She was such a vocal ningen.

'So that miko found This Sesshoumaru attractive? Hmm-interesting.'

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i want to see how this ends!

Oh That was Priceless.

So funny

Me too i just have a bad grammar and tenses but you overdo it. . Good job!

So Awsome Gettim Kags Gettim.

I like your story idea. Yes there  are grammar errors however they a not that bad. Keep writing and it will get better. Good luck. Looking forward to next chapter,