I like the plot but there are some spelling mistakes in this story and it's some what hard to read .. you should think about getting a beta.
Again interesting story but your spelling needs some work. For instance its, perfect, Jewel, unfamiliar, increased, also there are instances where you forgot to add a letter, you wrote ow instead of now.
I will continue to read because it's an interesting story but perhaps a beta needs to be found to proofread.
you should try to get a beta to proof read some of your stories and edit alittle you have spelling mistakes but pretty intresting i will keep up with yor updates.
ryoko (Chapter 2) - Mon 09 Nov 2015
interesting story
its more spelling like (jewel)
Mona (Chapter 2) - Mon 09 Nov 2015
Great update looking for more to come.
Mona (Chapter 1) - Mon 09 Nov 2015
Interesting, your spelling of certain words are wrong but your grammar is fine. I quite enjoyed chapter 1 and can't wait to read more.
I wonder if Kikyo wanted to die or if she knew Inuyasha was near and knew he would take actions to revive her.
p.s. where was the rest of the Inu gang (Shippo, Sango, Miroku and Kirara).
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