Beautiful. The song of the true addict. It felt like sinful seduction, drawing you in, telling you it's not what you want, but you don't have a choice anyway, because you're going to beg for it....just give it a litle time, and a little push.... I loved the characterisation and the storytelling. It was dark, yeah, just like you warned me, but it was dark temptation. :: God God..I'm quoting the Axe adverts... ::

O.O -goes to take a cold shower... comes back- Very steamy, and the imagery was... WOW. I loved how it seems the rain was there to wash away their sins. It's beautifully written. -sighs dreamily- Dewa mata

This was interesting. You do have a way with words and I loved your imagery of it all. Comets, ice, and all that stuff. Love how you did that. This is indeed kinda dark and throughout it all, all I can think is 'Why the hell are they in a dark alley next to a dumpster?' I guess the world may never know. I love how you described their struggle/war of feelings and emotions (I believe this is your forte). For some reason I loved this line "a betrayal Shakespeare would be proud of" Great Job Akumi.

OooOhhh Lala, veeryyy kinkaayyy, mon cherie!!! :DDD Dark alley, scraping metal garbage cans, and a lusting demon, what else do you need? XDDD A very yummmyyy, experience for a first lemon.^~ More? Kaaayyy???

Like chocolate... Dark, rich and sinfully delicious! Good job on this one!

very nice akumi great job your suchan emotional writer.

I love it sweets. Your first semi lemon was for me. I feel honored. I like how you can write and show their desire and lust for one another in a darker light. You were born to write sweets. Thank you again for this amazing fic.

very good job, akumi. i liked it. ;D

Your first and i loved it. I really could picture it and I think i need a drink my throats dry. wow never would have guessed that it was your first. lol hugs and puppies

I know I already sent this in the email, but it's dark and full of lust. I loved the ending.

Very good Akumi! Great job.

Interesting. While not really in my taste, it was very well done. I could envision what was happening as I read and felt the emotions. Not bad Aku-chan.

Very nice. Dark and sinful.

ohhh wow mi-chan this was awsome!!!! kinda dark but full to the brim with deep deep emotions. you would have a hard time telling that his was ur first lemon...the detail was amazing, i could see it in my head!!! you did really great!! *huggs and lots of luv darling*