Hi there! I just wanted to say I am loving this story so far! The pacing is done really well. However, I did want to mention that there have been several instances up to this point where you have changed things previously described in the story. For example, first you said Sesshoumaru was 700, then 600, then over 1000. You also changed Kagome's mom's name. And in the chapter right now, I could be wrong but I think you changed Kagome's car as well.
They're simple things to miss, and I know I myself have mistakenly changed things like this in my own stories without knowing, so I wanted to let you know. ^_^
Also, if you ever decide you want an editor to help with your spelling, please feel free to contact me. I'm an English major. I'd be happy to look over things for you to fix the minor spelling mistakes. ^_^
Oh well, back to reading I go!
I've really enjoyed this entire story if i offer one constructive criticism it would be that you have some areas where words are missing or misspelled or repeated. But thank you the flow was well done the progression was nicely timed and your a good writter.
Toni (Chapter 24) - Sun 02 Oct 2016
just finished this - great story with a very powerful message
keep up the good work
Great chapters, keep it coming.
How God Created Mother
Good took the fragrance of a flower, The majesty of a tree, The gentleness of a morning a dew The calm of a quiet sea, The beauty of a twilight hour The soul of a starry night The laughter of the rippling brook, The grace of a bird in flight, Then God fashioned from these things A creation like no other, And when His masterpiece was through, He called it simply...MOTHER.
Happy Mother's Day!
There are Angels God put on this Earth Who care for us and guide us. You can feel their love and gentleness as they walk through life beside us. They do great things for us every day they whisper in our ears, they even hold us in their hearts when we are filled with all our fears. They are always there to give us a hug and try to make us smile. They treat us with the respect and love, they treat us like their own child. God blessed me with an Angel, I’m proud to call my own. She’s been with me throughout my life, been with me as I’ve grown. She’s guided me the best she can, she’s taught me like no other, and I’m thankful I’m the lucky one who get’s to call her Mother
alexis (Chapter 23) - Tue 29 Dec 2015
Great story a lot of chapters gave me the chills in the beginnin!!! Can't wait for u to update!!!
Haven (Chapter 23) - Tue 27 Oct 2015
I just finished reading the 23 chapters you have posted and all I have to say is wow......
rose (Chapter 22) - Mon 14 Sep 2015
next chapter please
Why did you change Kagome's mother's name from Kun-Loon (Kay) to Suko?
I have a question about Chapter 6. I thought it indicated that Kagome decided to not wear the hairband. However, later in the chapter it indicates her snapping it. Did she wear it or not?
Szira (Chapter 21) - Fri 21 Aug 2015
First off, congrats on graduating! Well it didn't feel like you were finished so I hope you update soon! I just binge-read (is this a thing? Like binge watching... Whatever) 1-21 of your story and I love it.
Some parts do seem to go a little fast, which is somewhat detracting. I was able to get over that petty easily though The part that really distracted me from the story though was the spelling and grammatical errors. I can't speak for anyone else but for me they completely throw my train off the tracks. There were a couple times where I considered quitting entirely. I'm not trying to be insulting I'm just hoping this will help you become a better writer.
If you like you can send me a message and i'd be happy to edit (beta?) your story for you.
That all being said I'm really happy/proud(?) that whole Kagome had this huge life interruption, twice(!), she is being resilient and coming back. Strong women in anything are always admirable. For me, a female, it's something I latch on to. Really enjoying your rendition of Sesshomaru as well. He's like dream guy. Strong, loving, affectionate, successful, attractive, more adjectives... Hehe. And finally your lack of using Rin is refreshing.
Can't wait to see what you come up with next :)
rose (Chapter 21) - Wed 19 Aug 2015
next chapter please
Tarajah (Chapter 1) - Thu 13 Aug 2015
Really looking forward to what happens to Inuyasha.... Can't wait for the next update
Cherise (Chapter 20) - Mon 13 Jul 2015
I love this story! Please update soon :)
next chapter please
rose (Chapter 19) - Sat 23 May 2015
next chapter please
Meri (Chapter 19) - Thu 21 May 2015
I read part of this story once on FFN and I lost the link and forgot the name. I am so happy to see you have continued it. I can not wait for a update!!!!!!!!!
Haven (Chapter 19) - Thu 21 May 2015
I can't wait to see what happens to Inuyasha and Naraku.
Alashia (Chapter 18) - Thu 21 May 2015
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