Ok, So I love the story. It's really good and I couldn't stop reading. Like really nice job (^-^)/ The only real problem I had was when I started reading from the 6th chapter...Kagome just irritates me. I mean it shows how awesome you are as a writer to get some type of emotion out of the reader, but at this point kagome just seems weak. She kind of disappointed me, since not only did she give in way too easily and throw out any self respect she had for herself, she also betrayed her friends. I mean her reasons are shaky at best and it was like any bond they had shared in the past was just ignored. She's entirely ruled by instinct when it comes to her hormones, she acts as if she's a pre-pubescent teen that wants to go at it like a rabbit. However, I guess this could all be explained. She's confused, and learned of a different personality, has been in a sexual relationship with her now enemy so her body may be reacting due to the body's remembrance of his touch...but still after chap 7 I really want to make Sesshomaru cry, give him a taste of his own medicine. I think I would take deep pleasure in that XD
Which reminds me, what is up with Sesshomaru?! He killed Rin!! WHUY?! Not only that but he seems even more ooc than Kagome. Like why would he EVER side with Naraku? It seemed that after the arm incident and that not working out he seemed to pretty much see him as even more below him than Inuyasha. And Inuyasha...oh inuyasha, he always seems to never get happiness and he fell for the same thing TWICE! Why would he even agree to get revenge on kagome in the first place? It made it seem as if he never truly loved her, just thought he did and was basically lying to himself. >~> I'm sorry that I'm ranting. It's just that these characters kinda wanna make me throw a book at them, and destroy them. One thing though that I really did like, the fact that Kagome didn't turn into an inu. THANK YOU! I was pleasantly surprised at your choice and I have to say I love it (^_~)? Anyway, I just had to lay that all out. I do think that you are doing an amazing job and I really can't wait for more.
Holy sh*t that was :o, i'm speechless. Btw i would like if kagome forget about inuyasha or should i say kagome in the beginning chapter, she's just obedient and yummy. Update soon please! ;)
Cheryl (Chapter 7) - Fri 23 Jan 2015
interesting take on this story, pretty good~ can't wait to see the next chapter :)
What a great story! I love the twists and turns of this story. Can't wait to read more!
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