I enjoyed reading this beautifully written One-shot. I posted the banner that is inspired by this story. I must say, I love your writing style. There is a nice flow to it while reading.
I love how you brought out Kagome's compassionate and pure heart. She would indeed go to the extreme for the sake of others. I love how you also incorporated the Christmas gifts :)
There were a lot of emotion involved with this one-shot...and I just loved that!
Great job!
Awwwww! Please say you'll continue this? Or make a series of one shots that centers around this story??? Please....
Hehe here I am again (; I just wanted to reiterate how much I loved this! You were super thoughtful in her gifts and it was so touching when Shippou and Kags became truly bonded! Also, I loke that Sesshoumaru put his pride aside and asked for their help in helping Rin (: and let's not forget that cute scene of future Sesshoumaru and that pup (; Thank you Again!
-MissKatt
Not bad, but needs some fixing up with the speech lines. You wrote “Your loving compassion knows no bounds, you judge others by their actions, not their bloodlines.” “When I had nearly lost all sense and hope you gave my daughter back to me.” “She is yours as much as mine now.” “I would gladly claim your kit in turn.” “Knowing you've raised him in the same noble way.” He went on. since it's just one person speaking you do not need to keep putting "" at every part where you put a period. The point of them is to show when a person has started talking and when they have finished. Periods and commas are used as a sort of break where the person would take a breath. So you should have written it like this “Your loving compassion knows no bounds, you judge others by their actions, and not their bloodlines. When I had nearly lost all sense of hope you gave my daughter back to me. She is yours as much as mine now and I would gladly claim your kit in turn knowimg you've raised him in the same noble way.” He went on. see the difference it makes. But good idea for a story.
This story was wonderful and I enjoyed it, Merry Christmas and a Happy New Year!
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