Usually, I read fanfiction purely for entertainment. I have read many stories with great concepts and plot, but they all had very little artistry. I had given up on finding stories that balanced plot, character, and grammatical artistry a long time ago. But reading this work has shown me that great stories can be found in the world of fanfiction, and it has motivated me to stop simplifying my fiction in hopes of popularity. I really look forward to seeing what you do next. Please update soon.
Though written quite well, I must say, "What?" I do not get this. Guess it isn't time yet. Has their powers somehow interwined? I could understand Sesshoumaru feeling anger at this as it wasn't what he that allowed such a thing. Where is the tiny, bloody life that Kagome could feel dying between her legs? She was attempting to get answers from Sesshoumaru as she didn't understand.
Why is she the traitor? They were allies and Kagome isn't one to betray an ally. I will wait as curiousity will not kill this cat.
Sarah (Chapter 2) - Thu 11 Dec 2014
| I dont get it, did she have the baby or somehow she found it and its Sesshoumaru.
Kagome was pregnant and she was so lost inside herself she gave birth to Sesshoumaru's child. But what I don't get and it's only natural with such little info, is why was she in a cell filled with water where there is no heat, no anything?
You've got my interest and I will continue to follow. Oh and in Chapter one, there is one word that I could find that needs correcting. You write about her captor being "lacks" this needs to be spelled "lax". Lacks means to be missing something but lax means lazy, not careful or strict enough. I don't usually correct a writer anymore as I always seem to get scolded for doing so. But Spell Check will allow any word by as long as it's spelled right it seems and this has been so well written, well, I just couldn't help it.
I really like the intensity and dramatic effects. I love and hate this kind of fic, you know? Now that I've started it and it's had this much intensity in so little time, I've just got to find out the rest. I do hope you can keep up this kind of work. Great job so far. JEN
What a first chapter!! This is amazing! I am definitely looking forward to the next update!!!! I hope you dont take ages to update! :-)
Woah. Intense. I love the preview. Made me immediately click to check out the story. The story was just as intense so great job. I cant wait to see the rest of thr story!
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