Reviews for I'm Not Rin by ShadowFoxMoon

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SammyJams (Chapter 8) - Sun 15 Mar 2020

Guess I'll never know what happens - makes me a sad panda 


SammyJams (Chapter 1) - Mon 24 Jul 2017

So sad this was never finished! It's a great story!


Jessica Wilms (Chapter 8) - Fri 18 Nov 2016

I love this story. Sesshoumaru is portrayed really well, and not acting all fluffy and in love with Kagome from their first meeting onwards. Thats why I really really want to read more. So I'd like to know when this will be continued. Pleeease let it be soon...^^


LibraCourt (Chapter 8) - Wed 16 Sep 2015

Is there going to be a new chapter soon? Been waiting a long time or is this story being abandoned? 


Vixenia (Chapter 8) - Wed 15 Apr 2015

T.T really hope you update soon. So obsessed with this fanfic. I REALLLLLLLLLY wanna know what happens next!


Aiyoku Saotome (Chapter 8) - Fri 27 Mar 2015

I love it! 


Lazurite (Chapter 8) - Sat 31 Jan 2015

So I really like your story but I'm a bit confused because it doesn't seem to match the summary? Is that a mistake or is it just not that far along yet?


Lazurite (Chapter 5) - Sat 31 Jan 2015

He's got a really short fuse... 


Lazurite (Chapter 4) - Sat 31 Jan 2015

Sesshoumaru only seems to have one solution to every problem... So what is he having made?


Lazurite (Chapter 3) - Sat 31 Jan 2015

So Inuyasha doesn't seem to know Sesshoumaru saved him, but does anyone else know beside Kagome?


Lazurite (Chapter 2) - Sat 31 Jan 2015

Hm... what could he want from Kagome? (also, it's "imminent death")


KShadeslady (Chapter 8) - Mon 19 Jan 2015

Great chapter. Pretty good with the medical stuff. I don't think I could set up a transfusion on my own without fainting. Love all the Jaken jabs. So funny. Looking forward to more. 


HimeChou (Chapter 8) - Sun 18 Jan 2015

I like this story, because it isn't following the typical formula of bad Inuyasha+Kikyou+Kagome+special magical power+Sesshoumaru= happy story time. There are some grammatical issues, that I think could be worked out with a beta, and honestly though they do "ping" in my mind when I pass one as I read, I do still read the story because it does have such a wonderful plot line going for it.

Small note on blood types and transfusions. O- is actually the universal donor, and unless Rin is also O- her blood would have killed Kagome. It could technically be said when Kagome mixed the two in the vials, and the blood did not clot, that they are the same blood type... Unfortunately when writing the difficult question, "if it isn't relevant to the story, is this detail needed?" has to be asked, and sometimes some things though they may flow well in your midn don't actually mesh with the details you can provide without going overboard. I can only assume you have an interest in medicine or it wouldn't be so prevelant in your story. 

Keep writing, I look forward to the next update,

 

 


Eva (Chapter 8) - Sun 18 Jan 2015

Thanks for trying to provide us with a treatment for this plague. For most people with a layman's knowledge it was just fine. I suspect that the cure had less to do with blood types and immunity and more to do with miko reiki.

I'm really enjoying your story so far, although I wonder how they're relationship, as unequal as it is, will ever be amicable enough to lead up to your story summary. She and Inuyasha seem to still have romantic feelings for one another based on the last part of the chapter. A lot obviously needs to change.

I really don't want to see the obligatory hot spring scene where he sees her naked body and falls instantly in lust, his beast forcing his rational side in line. Those stories have their place and are fun in their own right. This shouldn't be one of those. I like the way you are taking things more seriously and slowly. I also hope that this isn't another she suddenly turns youkai fic. There are enough of those already. I believe that Kagome is immune to time anyway because of the shikon no tama and will remain so.

What I would like to see is a scene where Sesshoumaru observes Kagome doing something that causes him to start thinking about her as something more than a miko or human. Perhaps he could observe her teaching her kit reading and writing or math.

I would also like a scene where he observes that she considers Shippo to be her son and treats him well. He might think she treats Rin well because he would kill her otherwise, but she really has no ulterior motive to care for Shippo the way she does.

Thanks for sharing your talent with us.


Literary Fan (Chapter 8) - Sun 18 Jan 2015

I really appreciated this latest update. Now we know where this illness originated from and Rin survived. Amusing seeing Jaken being sent away for herbs. Also, I like the flow of your story. Thanks for the update.


Saiya (Chapter 8) - Sun 18 Jan 2015

That was so Awsome Kagome Rocks. man those Blue Roses are Deadly. I am SO ThankFull that you Updated i saw it and Went HEELLL YYYAAAAA. It made my Day.


Loveyaa (Chapter 8) - Sat 17 Jan 2015

An interesting idea. Kagome continues to walk on eggshells around Sesshoumaru. I wonder when that will start to change. I can't wait to see what happens next :)


l'-'jj (Chapter 8) - Sat 17 Jan 2015

You seriously need a beta. I won't be able to tell you how many spelling  and grammar mistakes I noticed when reading this story. And you really need to sort out your tenses- you were pretty much all the time interchangeably using both present and past tense! I would gauge my own eyes before even thinking about posting something of such poor quality...

BUT!

The story flows, the story works and it has its own spirit,  so employ a beta or two, but keep it up!

On another note,  that last chapter should be scrapped,  or at east most of it. I can't even start telling you where it just does not make sense.  Lets forget  where she would get all those medical supplies - Hojo's family works in a pharmacy,  not hospital,  so no help there. Those blood bags are complete hogwash. Think gravity! Direct blod transfusion carries an immense risk and when done, you have a machine pumping the blood from one person to another. And I know as much from something seen on TV years ago.  Even if Kagome might be the universal donor, there are more adverse reactions in blood transfusion than the wrong blood group. And that just makes it even more idiotic for her to take Rin's blood into her body. Unles Rin is an O blood type, Kagome just killed herself. Not to mention the stupidity in pumping into herself all of that infected blood (and I don't think you could have black blood while still maintaining life, maybe in the final stages of black plague - at least not something you would be able to gt out of in couple of days with no visible aftereffects).  If you wanted to do some of that blood thing, she should have just drawn some of hers andgive it to the girl, or, if you wanted it a little more fancy, separate the redblood cells from the plasma - you could have had Sesshoumaru acting as the centrifuge. Even then, I would imagine Rin being sick for at least couple of days,  maybe a week, feverish - her body reacting to the new antibodies. Also the progression of the sickness is way too swift to be believable, unless of demonic nature. And I do smell Naraku behind this.

Despite all the listed bad points,  I do like your story. Which kinda surprises me, but whatever. It's just that last chapter freaked me out. And just maybe we haven't seen any of the side characters,  you know, like maybe Kouga? Kagura? Naraku?

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 


NanashiTenshi (Chapter 8) - Sat 17 Jan 2015

I loved this! I especially liked the part where Jaken wanted to do whatever he could to help Rin. I don't know why, but I love seeing that the little angry demon actually loves Rin to death. Thank you so much for the awesome chapter. 


Debra (Chapter 8) - Sat 17 Jan 2015

Good chapter. I wish he would stop being so cruel to her, but I guess he is a cruel being and thsat doesn't change.


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