Very cute, love your ideas, the necklace and flower exchange was do sweet, I hope to read more of your work, I think you should get a beta just for good measure 

I like where this is headed. There are a couple grammatical errors but with more writing I am sure you will improve.

So far so good. 

Please do continue to write. You have made me curious.

I really loved this story, the progression was sweet. But for future stories, please please please have someone go over it for spelling errors and grammar. Several words were unidentifiable, and others were misused. You have amazing ideas for how to write a story, now you just need to work on making it legible.

Good chapter, keep it coming

Your story was good... the grammar needs a little work. I think the pendant and flower transfer was sweet. Good luck with future stories.

hope to read more!!!!

Sailor Moon new anime has already aired three episodes, If you missed them you can watch them on youtube. Nice chapter, keep it coming

I like the direction this is going and would like to see more. But you really need to proof read and check your spelling and word usage. All three chapters had them and this last chapter was very hard to read. If you can use microsoft word or any software that auto corrects or spell check. And maybe ask in the forums for a beta read.

Hope you are inspired to keep going.

 Sailor Moon new anime will premiere on July 5. Good chapter, keep it coming.

What Makes A Dad

God took the strength of a mountain,
The majesty of a tree,
The warmth of a summer run,
The calm of a quiet sea,
The generous soul of nature,
The comforting arm of night,
The wisdom of the ages,
The power of the eagle's flight,
The joy of a morning in spring,
The faith of a mustard seed,
The patience of eternity,
The depth of a family need,
Then God combined these qualities,
When there was nothing more to add,
He knew His masterpiece was complete,
And so, He called it...Dad.

Happy Father's Day!

I like this story and the direction that it is going in. My problem is some of the misuse of words in all three chapters. Maybe at some point go back through and reread to see what changes need to be made. other than that I am looking forward to the next chapter and seeing how this story unfolds. Keep up the good work! :D

Great, keep it coming.

Nice, keep it coming.

How God Created Mother

Good took the fragrance of a flower,
The majesty of a tree,
The gentleness of a morning a dew
The calm of a quiet sea,
The beauty of a twilight hour
The soul of a starry night
The laughter of the rippling brook,
The grace of a bird in flight,
Then God fashioned from these things
A creation like no other,
And when His masterpiece was through,
He called it simply...MOTHER.

Happy Mother's Day!